Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illistrates how working adults spent their time in particularly country in the period of 1958 and 2008.

Overall, working and sleeping both are least interested activities by children's in both the year as compare to other activities. While the proportion of time spent going out with family and friends and travelling at work became much less common.

In 1958, the youth spend their quality timing on working (33%), and sleeping hold second position with 32%. Furthermore, only 12% like to go outside with family and friends. Moreover, the youth showed lower interest in relaxing at home(8%) and travelling to work(2%).

In 2008, the share of time spent on working activities climbed upto 42%, whereas sleeping has fallen to 25%. Relaxing at home increased by 13% and travelling to work and playing sports both stood at 7%. While going out with family and friends sharply drop upto 6%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several important comparisons, including the rise in working time from 33% to 42% and the fall in sleeping from 32% to 25%. However, the overview contains major inaccuracies: working and sleeping were not the least common activities, and going out with friends and family became less common while travelling to work increased. The 1958 figure for going out is also reported as 12%, rather than 19%. Referring to the adults as “children” or “youth” further misrepresents the chart. Although you include figures for most categories, these errors and the unclear overview mean the main features are only partially and inconsistently reported. Focus on accurate overall trends and compare the two years directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for 1958 and 2008. This makes the information easy to locate, and linking expressions such as “whereas” and “Furthermore” help connect details. However, some connections are mechanical or confusing. The overview says that going out and travelling became “much less common,” although travel actually rose, and the opening claim about the least common activities does not lead clearly into the data paragraphs. The repeated use of “Moreover” and “While” also creates awkward transitions, including a sentence fragment at the end. Improve progression by grouping the main increases together and the decreases together, and ensure each linking phrase accurately reflects the comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “share,” “climbed,” and “fell,” and these help communicate changes. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “least interested activities,” “quality timing,” “travelling at work,” and “drop upto.” The repeated references to “youth” and “children” are also unsuitable because the chart concerns working adults. There is some attempt to vary vocabulary, but errors in word choice and spelling—such as “illistrates”—make the description less precise. Use standard terms for activities and time allocation, and choose verbs that describe the data rather than people’s preferences.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “whereas” and “while,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors occur across sentence structures and verb forms. For example, “working and sleeping both are” has incorrect word order, while “the youth spend” and “going out … sharply drop” use verb forms that do not fit the past-time comparison. The sentence beginning “While going out…” is incomplete, and “in particularly country” is missing an article and has an incorrect adjective form. These problems make some statements difficult to follow. Practise forming complete comparison sentences and maintaining consistent past-tense reporting, while checking subject–verb agreement and articles.

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