Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

General life style time spending habits of working adults can develop and change from generation to generation.

In fact in 1958 adults spent only 2% of their time travelling to work 30% of their day comparison with 7% travelling to work 42% of their total day hours which is a huge and scary jump

Furthermore more in 60s working adults spent more time socialising, e and even sleeping or practicing certain sports and hobbies or even sleeping than in the 21th century which reflects a huge shift in their lifestyle statistics shows that in 1958 people that are actively working spent 19% of their time socialising and going out with freinds and family in comparison with 6% in 2008 also numbers shows that in the same year people shrunk their sleeping qtime by 7% wich was a whopping 32% in 1985. But an increase of time spent at home which was 8% in 1985 to 13% in 2008 due to the popularity of television and tv shows at the time. But somehow this category of people managed to keep the time spent on practising sports the same in between those two dates

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant changes, including the rise in working time from 33% to 42%, the increase in commuting from 2% to 7%, and the fall in socialising from 19% to 6%. However, the response only partially summarises the charts: it lacks a clear overview of the main patterns and omits the important 2008 figure for sports and the 1958 figure for relaxing at home. Some details are inaccurate: sleeping fell from 32% in 1958 to 25% in 2008, but you refer to 1985, and the charts do not show that sports time stayed the same; sports is listed only for 2008. The claim about television causing more time at home is also unsupported. Select the main comparisons and report them without adding explanations the charts cannot establish.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation around comparisons between the two years, and linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “in comparison with” help signal relationships. However, the response has no clear paragraph structure or distinct overview, so the reader must work to identify the main message. Several ideas are crowded into long sentences, especially the section beginning “Furthermore more in 60s,” where socialising, sleeping, sports and hobbies are combined. Repetition and unclear connections also weaken progression. Separate the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and one or two paragraphs grouping the key comparisons. Use linking words only where they accurately show how the figures relate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing the charts, including “spent,” “travelling to work,” “socialising,” and “increase.” There is also an attempt to vary expression with phrases such as “huge shift.” However, word choice and spelling errors are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow: “freinds,” “qtime,” and “21th century” are examples. Some expressions are informal or imprecise for an academic report, such as “scary jump” and “whopping,” while “shrunk their sleeping” is an unnatural collocation. Aim for neutral, precise language and use the chart’s category labels consistently, such as “time spent sleeping” and “relaxing at home.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, but these structures are often faulty, and the response contains frequent errors that can make relationships between figures unclear. For example, “In fact in 1958 adults spent only 2% of their time travelling to work 30% of their day comparison with 7%...” lacks a clear grammatical connection between the figures. The sentence beginning “Furthermore more in 60s” also has an incomplete, confusing structure, and punctuation is often missing between clauses. There are problems with articles and sentence boundaries, as well as inconsistent tense and number forms. Build clearer sentences around one comparison at a time, checking that each has a subject and verb and that clauses are separated with appropriate punctuation.

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