Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

if we see the 1958 adult rutine they do very less activities in their whole they like spending theoier time with family and while workjing and relex and splleping and they travel very less mosy of there time spend in work and sleeping 33 and 32 preccwnte respectevly and they travel very less and

but the 2008 kids haveintroduce the playing of suports in there day mean while in compariseion of both they have more less the same rutine like 2008 kids add thier some time in playing suppoutr but on the other hand they start more working and they reduce thier sleeping time but they relax more at more at home then 1958 adults but 2008 kid have lost thier segnificant time in travel to work in which they can go out with thier family. if we see the rutine qand the work life blace of 1958 kids are much more better and good then then the kids 2008 adults. they have small time to focus on them self and spend more on the work etc stuff.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response identifies some relevant features, including that work and sleep took substantial shares in 1958, and that working increased while sleeping decreased by 2008. It also notices the appearance of sports in the later chart. However, the account is only minimally focused on summarising the charts: it gives few accurate comparisons and includes unsupported interpretations, such as saying adults in 1958 had a “much more better” work-life balance and that 2008 adults had less time to focus on themselves. Some details are inaccurate or unclear; for example, travel rose from 2% to 7%, rather than being described as a loss of time. A clearer overview of the main shifts, supported by selected figures, would make the response more complete and relevant.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to compare the two years, using phrases such as “in compariseion of both” and “on the other hand,” and the response broadly moves from 1958 to 2008. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the long, loosely connected sentences make the progression difficult to follow. The opening repeats that travel was limited without clearly linking this to the figures, while the final comments about work-life balance introduce a conclusion that is not established by the chart. Connectors are sometimes used mechanically or inaccurately, and references such as “they” and “their” do not always make clear whether the writer means adults or children. Grouping the overview and comparisons into distinct sections would improve clarity.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant activity words, including “working,” “sleeping,” “relax,” “travel,” and “playing,” so the general subject can be recognised. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling errors—such as “rutine,” “relex,” “suppoutr,” and “segnificant”—make the text harder to understand. Several expressions are not suitable for describing chart data: “kids” is used for working adults, and “spend theoier time” does not communicate a clear meaning. Phrases such as “more less the same rutine” are also imprecise. Use accurate chart vocabulary and straightforward comparisons, for example, “the proportion spent working increased” or “time spent sleeping fell.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine ideas with clauses, including “while” and “but,” but sentence structures are very limited and frequently faulty, which sometimes obscures meaning. For example, “they do very less activities in their whole” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “most of there time spend in work and sleeping” has problems with subject–verb structure and articles. Tense and agreement are inconsistent, as in “the 2008 kids have introduce,” while several sentences run together without reliable punctuation. These errors make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise writing short, complete comparison sentences first, then add subordinate clauses carefully; check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb and that punctuation separates complete ideas.

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