Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the propotion of time allocated to different activities in day of adults that are employed for the two years 1958 and 2008. Overall, the pie charts has six segments and four of the segments had an increase in allocated time, whilst two of the segments had a decrease.

In 1958, it shows that approximately two-thirds of the day was allocated to working and sleeping 33% and 32% respectively. In 2008 there was a shift as adults spent almost half the day working (42%) and in contrast, sleep accounted for a quater of the day. The working class spent more time relaxing at home(13%) in 2008 as compared to 8% in 1958.

On the other hand it shows that wokers were spending more time travelling to work in 2008(7%) rather than the 2% which was allocated previously. Time speant with friends was also cut short in 2008 from 19% to 6%. ,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main shift towards working and away from sleeping and socialising, and support this with accurate figures: work rises from 33% to 42%, while time with friends and family falls from 19% to 6%. The comparisons for relaxing at home and commuting are also relevant. However, the overview is not fully accurate: it says four categories increased and two decreased, but there are six categories in 2008 and only five in 1958, with sport appearing only in 2008. The response also omits this new category, and the claim that four segments increased is not clearly supported. Develop the overview by highlighting the largest changes and noting the addition of sport; this would make the coverage more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction and overview are followed by comparisons between the two years. Phrases such as “In 1958” and “On the other hand” help signal shifts in focus, and the figures are generally grouped in a sensible way. However, the overview’s statement about four increases and two decreases is difficult to follow because the categories are not consistently identified, and the final paragraph ends abruptly after the comparison of socialising. The transition “On the other hand” does not clearly contrast with the preceding point. Organise the body around the main increases and decreases, use clearer links between them, and ensure the final sentence completes the comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of task-related vocabulary, including “allocated,” “accounted for,” “shift,” and “cut short,” and the reader can understand the comparisons. Some choices, however, are imprecise or awkward for describing chart data. “The working class” refers to a social group rather than working adults, while “time allocated to” is repeated and can sound unnatural in this context. There are also spelling errors such as “propotion,” “quater,” “wokers,” and “speant.” These do not prevent understanding, but they reduce accuracy and control. Use standard chart language consistently, such as “the proportion of the day spent on,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “whilst” and a comparison introduced by “as compared to.” Meaning is usually clear, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “the pie charts has” has subject–verb disagreement, and “in day of adults” is missing an article and has an awkward grammatical structure. The sentence beginning “In 1958, it shows” also shifts tense and uses an unclear “it” reference. Punctuation is occasionally faulty, particularly the comma and full stop after “from 19% to 6%.” Aim for consistent past-tense reporting, accurate articles and agreement, and complete, carefully punctuated sentences.

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