Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie charts below show the how working adults in a particular country spent their time the year of 1958 to 2008.

First of all, percentage of the day spent by working adults on various activities. The six types of the adults Going out with friends\family, Travelling to work, Sleeping, Playing sport, Relaxing at home, working.

Show the year of 1958 the Going out wioth friends\family show the 19%, Travelling to work 2%, sleeping show the 32%, Relaxing at home persent the 8%, playing 7% last adults Working show the 33%.

Secondly, the year of 2008 show the first adult Going out with show the 6%, Traveling to work 7%, Sleeping 25%, Relaxing at home 13%, Working 42%, and the last adult playing sport 7%.

Overall, the working highest to the yaer of 1958 to decrease the year of 2008, and the lowest percentage of the adult the name of Going out with friends\family.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You include figures for both years and identify several relevant categories, such as working (33% in 1958 and 42% in 2008) and sleeping (32% and 25%). However, the response does not give a reliable overview of the main changes: the statement that working “decrease[s]” is the opposite of the data, and going out with friends/family was not the lowest category in 1958. You also assign 7% for playing sport in 1958, although that category is not shown for that year. The opening and category list take space without summarising the key contrasts. The response is 144 words, below the 150-word minimum. Focus on accurate overall trends and compare the largest changes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence, moving from an introduction to 1958 figures, then 2008 figures, and finally an overall statement. “First of all,” “Secondly,” and “Overall” help signal these sections, so the reader can broadly follow the intended comparison. However, the progression is mostly a list of figures rather than a connected summary, and the overview comes only at the end and is unclear. The opening category list interrupts the flow, while phrases such as “the first adult” and “the last adult” do not clearly refer to chart categories. Group the information into a concise overview and two comparison-focused paragraphs, using clear references to the activities and linking changes between years.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “Sleeping,” “Working,” and “Relaxing at home,” and the activity labels generally make the data recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “show” used repeatedly to introduce figures. Several word choices or forms are inaccurate, such as “the first adult,” “the last adult,” “persent,” and “wioth”; these make parts of the report awkward or less clear. Use precise reporting language such as “accounted for,” “rose to,” and “fell to,” and refer to categories as activities rather than adults. Check spelling and reproduce chart labels accurately. More varied, accurate vocabulary would make the comparisons clearer and more appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to report information in sentences and use some sequencing expressions, but grammatical control is weak and sentence structures are mostly simple or incomplete. For example, “First of all, percentage of the day spent by working adults on various activities” is a fragment, while “Show the year of 1958 the Going out…” lacks a clear subject and verb. The opening phrase “show the how” also has an unnecessary article, and “Overall, the working highest…” does not form a complete, accurate comparison. These errors often make relationships between figures difficult to follow. Practise complete subject–verb sentences, for example, “In 1958, working accounted for 33% of the day, rising to 42% in 2008,” and check articles, verb forms, and punctuation.

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