Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart compares between different activities done by adults with a job in a specific country during the year 1958 and 2008.

Overall, a change in spending time is seen over the period of years such as adults would go out with their families or friends back in 1958 but it dropped massively in 2008. Also some things remain quiet same as sleeping and working percentage didn't flactuate much.

In the chart, during 1958, people would spend their time mosly by sleeping or working which was 32% and 33% respectively. After that, hanging out with friends and family were top priority with 19% and they seldom played any sports or relaxed at home.

On the other hand, in 2008, the working adults percentage rose to 42% and sleeping coming in second position occupying 25% with a noticable change in adults relaxing at home from 1958 and increased to 13% from 8%. Also, people spent less time with friends and family which dropped to 6%.

In summary, although adults changed duration of some activities main priority remained work and after that sleep.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall shift: going out with friends or family fell sharply, while work became the largest activity in 2008. You also report several key figures accurately, including work and sleep in 1958, and the 2008 figures for work, sleep, relaxing at home and socialising. However, the overview is partly unclear: saying work and sleep “didn't fluctuate much” overlooks the rise in work from 33% to 42% and the fall in sleep from 32% to 25%. The comparison also omits the increase in commuting from 2% to 7% and the 7% spent playing sports in 2008. Develop the overview around the largest changes and include these remaining categories to make the coverage more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, separate descriptions of the two years, and a concluding summary. The contrastive link “On the other hand” helps signal the move to 2008, and the figures are generally grouped by year. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some of the clearer progression associated with the next level. However, the final “In summary” repeats the overview rather than adding a useful comparison, and links such as “After that” do not clearly express a ranking or time sequence between categories. Improve progression by grouping the most important increases and decreases across both years, and use references such as “this figure” only when their meaning is unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing the charts, including “rose,” “dropped,” “occupying,” and “priority,” and the reader can understand the main comparisons. There is some variety, but several choices are imprecise or informal for an academic report: “hanging out” and “top priority” are conversational, while “spending time” is repeated. Some word forms and spelling errors are noticeable, including “flactuate,” “mosly,” and “noticable.” These do not prevent understanding, but they limit precision and control. Aim for consistent chart language such as “accounted for,” “increased,” and “declined,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, and most of the data remains understandable. Some grammatical errors occur in sentence construction and verb forms. For example, “The pie chart compares between different activities” uses an unnecessary preposition, while “sleeping and working percentage didn't fluctuate” has a number-agreement problem. In “sleeping coming in second position,” the verb form does not fit the sentence, and “adults would go out” is an awkward tense choice for describing chart data. The sentence beginning “Also some things remain…” is also loosely connected to the overview. Use present-tense reporting structures consistently, check singular and plural agreement, and build comparisons with clear forms such as “the proportion who slept fell.”

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