Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie charts provides information about different activities that employed adults of a certain nation utilize their time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, adults daily routine mostly contain working that's why it is highest in both charts. However, a significant change is seen in sleeping as it has decreased as compared to previous year. Rise in relaxing at home and travelling to work is noticed while observing both charts.

In 1958, 33% of adults time conatin working which is largest in this chart.

Following this is the sleeping which is 32% and going out with friends or family that is 19%,finally relaxing at home with 8%, least with travelling to work and remaining with playing sports.

Furthermore, in 2009, there is 9% rise in working section making it highest in both chart. There is decline in sleeping time reaching 25% in 2008. However, travelling to work and relaxing at home activities has faced rise making it 7% and 13%. Going out with friends and family was decreased by 13% in 2008. and playing spirts was acconted by only 7% which is equal to travelling to work.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern that working took the largest share in both years and note the decline in sleeping, as well as increases in travel and relaxing at home. Several figures are reported accurately, including working at 33% and 42%, and sleeping at 32% and 25%. However, the account is not fully precise: the second year is once called 2009, and the 1958 description says sports was a remaining category even though it is not shown for that year. The 13% fall in going out is also described without making clear that it fell from 19% to 6%. A clearer overview and more exact comparisons would make the key features more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an overview to details for 1958 and then 2008. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Following this,” and “Furthermore” help signal the sequence. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear: “Following this is the sleeping” does not smoothly introduce the next figure, and “least with travelling to work and remaining with playing sports” makes the category ranking difficult to follow. The final sentence also begins “and” after a full stop, disrupting the flow. Grouping the figures into clearer comparisons across years, and using references such as “this share” or “by contrast” accurately, would improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “decline,” “rise,” “highest,” and “decreased,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “utilize their time,” “working section,” and “faced rise.” There are also spelling errors, including “conatin,” “spirts,” and “acconted,” which reduce the accuracy of the vocabulary. Some repetition of “rise,” “decline,” and “making” limits flexibility. Aim for standard chart language such as “spent,” “proportion,” “increased to,” and “accounted for,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “However” and a clause beginning “as it has decreased.” Meaning is usually recoverable, but errors occur in sentence structure, agreement, tense, and punctuation. For example, “The pie charts provides” has a plural subject with a singular verb, while “adults daily routine mostly contain” has agreement and possessive problems. In “activities has faced rise,” the plural subject does not agree with “has,” and the article is missing. The sentence fragment-like list beginning “Following this is…” is also awkwardly constructed. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and complete, clearly punctuated comparisons.

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