Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The pie charts compare the proportions of how working adults in a particular country spent their day on six activities in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, the working and sleeping activities accounted for the highest percentages of total. The percentage for going out with family or friends had declined while proportion of travelling to work and relaxing at home had increased. Playing sports remained the same in both years.

In 1958, workers spent their significant time about 33% at working and almost 32% at sleeping. Going out with family or friends were 19% ,whereas relaxing at home was only 8% of the total. The smallest, almost negligible proportion of 2% was taken by the travelling to work.

In 2008, working became the dominant activity of almost 42% of the total time spent. Sleeping reduced to 25% but contributed to the second preferred category by working people. Relaxation at home and travelling to work had increased to 13% and 7% relatively; however, outing with family reduced to 6%. Playing sports remained stable at 7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

You cover both years and identify the main shifts accurately: work rises from 33% to 42%, sleep falls from 32% to 25%, and socialising drops from 19% to 6%. The overview also highlights the increases in commuting and relaxing at home, giving the reader a clear summary of the chart. Most figures are reported correctly, and the comparison is supported with relevant details. However, the statement that “Playing sports remained the same in both years” is not supported: sports appears only in 2008, at 7%, and should be described as a new category shown in that year. Also, “working and sleeping activities accounted for the highest percentages” is slightly broad, since work is clearly highest in 2008 while the two are nearly equal in 1958. Clarifying these points would make the overview more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised effectively into an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two years. This gives the information a clear progression, and the reader can readily compare the figures. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “whereas,” and “however” help signal contrasts, while the repeated year-based structure is appropriate for this chart. Some connections are less smooth: “Relaxation at home and travelling to work had increased to 13% and 7% relatively” is difficult to process because “respectively” is needed to map each figure clearly to its activity. The overview’s claim that sports remained stable also disrupts the comparison because the category is absent in 1958. More precise referencing and transitions between the years would make cohesion more flexible and natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of chart vocabulary, including “proportions,” “accounted for,” “dominant activity,” “declined,” and “reduced.” These choices allow you to describe both shares and changes, and the meaning is generally clear. There are, however, some inaccurate or awkward collocations that limit precision. “Spent their significant time about 33% at working” is not a natural way to express a proportion; “spent 33% of their day working” would be clearer. “Second preferred category” also sounds as though the chart records preferences, rather than time allocation. In addition, “relatively” is used where “respectively” is required, and “outing with family” is less natural than “going out with family or friends.” More consistent, precise chart language would strengthen the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including contrast clauses with “whereas” and “but,” and most of the information remains understandable. Some grammatical errors persist, however. In “Going out with family or friends were 19%,” the singular activity requires “was,” or the sentence could be recast as “the figure was 19%.” The phrase “while proportion of travelling” needs an article (“while the proportion…”), and “workers spent their significant time about 33% at working” has an unclear grammatical structure. There are also punctuation and spacing slips, such as the space before the comma in “19% ,whereas.” Aim to build accurate percentage statements and check agreement, articles, and punctuation; this would improve control without sacrificing sentence variety.

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