Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart compares how working adults spent their day in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, working adults spend most of their time working in both the years while, the least amount of time they spend to travel in 1958 and going out with friends or family in 2008.

To start with, 1958 the working accounts for 33% in the chart which is the highest of all followed by, sleeping at 32%. Afterwards, going out stands for 19%, relaxing is only 8% and travel accounts for 2% which is the least of all.

Futhermore, working remains the highest in 2008 also, however it inclines to 42%, sleeping declines at 25%. However, travelling to work rise at 7% same as playing sports, although going out with friends and family reduce at 6% over the years. Relaxing at home also increase to 13%. It is clear that people over the years spent more time in working and relaxing at home rather than going out.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: work is the largest category in both years, while travel is smallest in 1958 and going out is smallest in 2008. The key figures you report—such as work rising from 33% to 42%, sleep falling to 25%, and going out dropping to 6%—match the chart. You also include the increase in relaxing at home and the appearance of sports in 2008. This gives the response a relevant overview and coverage of the main categories. To make the summary more complete and precise, compare the two years directly across more categories, especially the substantial fall in going out and the rise in commuting, and avoid the broad final claim that people spent more time relaxing rather than going out without specifying the changes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by one paragraph for each year, then a concluding comparison. This makes the information easy to follow, and phrases such as “Overall” and “Furthermore” help signal progression. However, some linking is mechanical or awkward: “To start with” and “Afterwards” do not clearly express the relationship between the figures, while repeated “however” interrupts the final paragraph. The overview and conclusion also partly repeat the same general point. For stronger progression, group the most important increases and decreases into a direct comparison, and use fewer, more precise transitions. Check punctuation around linking phrases, as the comma after “while” in the overview disrupts the sentence.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing chart data, including “accounts for,” “declines,” “reduce,” and “the highest.” These choices help communicate the main trends, and the meaning remains clear despite some imprecise wording. However, several expressions are not natural for this task: “the working accounts for 33%,” “it inclines to 42%,” and “travel accounts for 2%” would be clearer with standard chart-reporting collocations. “Going out stands for 19%” is also less precise than saying the proportion spent going out was 19%. There is a spelling error in “Futhermore.” Aim for consistent, accurate terms such as “share,” “proportion,” “rose,” and “fell” rather than varying phrasing where the collocation is uncertain.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “while” and a clause beginning “although,” so there is some structural variety. The main information is generally understandable, but several grammatical errors remain. For example, “working adults spend” shifts to the present tense when describing past data, and “the least amount of time they spend to travel” has an awkward clause structure. In “travelling to work rise at 7%” and “Relaxing at home also increase,” the verbs do not agree with their subjects and should be in the past tense. The opening overview also has an unnecessary comma in “while, the least amount.” Use past-tense verbs consistently and check subject–verb agreement and sentence punctuation.

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