Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie charts illustrates percentage of how working adults in a specfic country utalize their time in 1958 and 2008 on six activities.

Overall, the chart shows six differnet activities such as, relaxing at home, working, playing sports, going out with friends and family, traveling to work and sleeping in percentage which is performed by working adults.

In 1958, working percentage was 33 while in 2008 it show significant changed, it was 42 percent.the major drop had seen in going out with family and friends from 19 percent to 6 percent. Sleeping was 32 percent in 1958 and it shows decline in 2008, which is 25 percent.

On the other hand, least proportion of changes had seen in playing sports and traveling to work.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the two years and report several important figures accurately: working rises from 33% to 42%, going out falls from 19% to 6%, and sleeping declines from 32% to 25%. However, the response only partly covers the chart. It does not give the figures for relaxing at home, and the final statement about sports and commuting is unclear and omits their actual changes; sports appears only in 2008, at 7%, while travel rises from 2% to 7%. The overview mainly lists activities rather than summarising the dominant trends. The response is also 26 words below the required minimum, limiting the detail available. Include a clear overview and compare the remaining categories to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, a general statement, and then details about work, socialising and sleep. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “Overall” and “On the other hand” attempt to signal relationships. However, the overview repeats the activity list instead of presenting the main pattern, and the final sentence does not clearly connect to the preceding comparisons. The contrast marker “On the other hand” is not well suited to the point that follows, which groups two categories without explaining their relationship. Develop a clearer overview and organise the details into a logical comparison of increases and decreases, using linking phrases only where they accurately show the connection.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “significant,” “drop,” and “decline,” and the main comparisons are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate, such as “utilize their time,” “major drop had seen,” and “least proportion of changes.” Spelling errors, including “specfic,” “utalize,” and “differnet,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural language for describing data: for example, say that a proportion “increased” or “fell,” and that a category “accounted for” a particular percentage. Check spelling carefully and avoid using “significant” unless the change is clearly substantial in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more developed sentences, including comparisons with “while” and a relative clause beginning “which.” However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make the relationships between figures difficult to follow. For example, “The pie charts illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “in 2008 it show significant changed” contains errors in verb form and tense. The sentence beginning “the major drop had seen” also lacks a correctly formed passive construction. Punctuation and sentence boundaries need attention, particularly in “42 percent.the major drop.” Practise accurate past-tense reporting and basic comparison structures, such as “the figure rose from X to Y” and “the proportion fell from X to Y,” before adding more complex clauses.

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