Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the given pie chart showcashing the total hours of working adults in a particular country spent in 1958 and 2008.

taking an overview of given chart the working hours is increase steadily in both time period

and sleeping time is also show significantly rise in 2008 compare to 1958. afterthat all others things show mixed figure in both year.

A deep dive into the analysis in 1958 working hours is 33% and it show rising figure upto 42%. this is a highest one. and going out with friends/family is started 19% and show declined figure 6% only. traveling to work 2%started increase by 5% and relaxing at home is 8 % and goes upto 13% last one but not the least sleeping show the s

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify several relevant comparisons, including work rising from 33% to 42%, socialising falling from 19% to 6%, and travel increasing from 2% to 7%. However, the overview contains a major factual error: sleeping did not rise; it fell from 32% to 25%. The response also omits the 2008 figure for sports and does not complete its discussion of sleeping, so the main features are only partially reported. The chart is addressed, but the coverage is minimal and some information is inaccurate or unfinished. The response is also 24 words below the required minimum. To improve, give a complete overview of the largest changes, report the key figures accurately, and ensure every category you discuss is finished.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an opening, an overview, and a paragraph beginning “A deep dive into the analysis.” The figures are generally presented in a sequence, which gives the reader some sense of comparison. However, progression is weak: the overview is difficult to follow, and the final sentence stops at “sleeping show the s,” leaving the account incomplete. Connectors such as “afterthat” and “last one but not the least” are awkward or imprecise, and several ideas are crowded into one long sentence. Use clear paragraphing and straightforward links such as “By contrast” and “Meanwhile,” and check that each sentence develops one complete comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “working hours,” “declined,” “increase,” and “friends/family,” so the reader can recognise the intended comparisons. There is also an attempt to vary phrasing with “taking an overview” and “A deep dive into the analysis.” However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “showcashing,” “mixed figure,” and “started 19%.” Repetition of “show” and “figure” also makes the description less precise. Choose standard chart language and use it consistently—for example, “accounted for,” “rose,” “fell,” and “proportion.” Check spelling and word forms, including “travelling,” and avoid conversational expressions when a concise reporting phrase is clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer comparisons, but control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms and agreement appear in phrases such as “the working hours is increase steadily” and “sleeping time is also show,” while “working hours is 33%” does not form a clear grammatical comparison. Articles and sentence boundaries are also unreliable: the opening fragment beginning “In the given pie chart” lacks a complete main clause, and the long sequence of comparisons is joined with limited punctuation. These problems sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Practise complete subject–verb sentences, such as “The proportion of time spent working increased from 33% to 42%,” and separate each comparison with appropriate punctuation.

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