Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrate how working adults spend their variours activity in 1958 and 2008.

Overall,It can Clearly be seen that working adult in both year spend their most time in the work while playing sports will be the new various activity of 2008 adults.

In 1958 spend their 32 percent of the day spend by sleeping While 33 per cent adults are interested in working which is the most favourit activity in 1958. only 8 per cent adults like to does relaxing at home. In Comparisn,Travaling to home and going out with friend and family accounts for 2% and ,19%.

By 2008 working adults had a gradual increase (42%) youngurs who choose sleeping accounts for 25 per cent.In contrast, Only 13 percentage of the day spend by relaxing at home. travaling to work and playing sport shows the same amount of figure (7%) going out with friends /family 6 per cent respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern that working took the largest share in both years and note that sports appears in 2008, giving the response a relevant overview. Most figures are reported accurately, including work (33% to 42%), sleeping (32% to 25%), and relaxing at home (8% to 13%). However, the overview could compare the broader changes more clearly: socialising fell sharply from 19% to 6%, while commuting rose from 2% to 7%. The phrase “Travaling to home” also misidentifies travel to work. Sports is not simply a new activity in the sense of a change in people’s routines; it is a category shown only in the 2008 chart. A more complete overview and clearer comparisons would make the key features better developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of the two years. This gives the information an overall arrangement that readers can follow. You also use comparison signals such as “Overall,” “In Comparisn,” and “In contrast.” However, some links are mechanical or unclear, and punctuation makes the progression harder to follow—for example, “Overall,It can Clearly be seen” and the long final sentence listing several 2008 figures. The comparison between years is mostly handled in separate blocks, so changes across categories are not consistently connected. Use clearer sentence boundaries and group related changes, such as increases in work and commuting versus decreases in sleep and socialising, to strengthen progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “accounts for,” “increase,” “percentage,” and “in contrast,” and the reader can generally identify the activities being described. However, the range and control are limited, with repeated or inaccurate expressions such as “spend,” “activity,” and “amount of figure.” Several spelling errors—“variours,” “favourit,” “Comparisn,” and “Travaling”—are noticeable, while phrases such as “youngurs who choose sleeping” are unclear and do not suit a neutral report of chart data. Aim for precise, natural collocations and consistent terms for proportions and categories. For example, describe the share of the day “spent sleeping” rather than people who “choose sleeping.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including “while” and “which” clauses, and the main message is usually recoverable. However, errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and punctuation recur. For instance, “The pie chart illustrate” needs subject–verb agreement, while “working adult in both year spend” has problems with number and verb form. The sentence beginning “In 1958 spend their 32 percent” lacks a clear grammatical subject and structure, and the final sentence joins several ideas without clear boundaries. Capitalisation after commas is also inconsistent. Build accurate basic sentences first, then add comparisons using controlled clauses; check agreement, articles, and punctuation when editing.

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