Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Pie chart demonstrates that how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall the various change is going out with family/friends as it was more in 1958 than in 2008. Also sleeping is higher in 1958 than in 2008 in adults, While in 2008 rest of the things were higher like travelling to work, working, relaxing as home and playing sports, Then in 1958 it was lower in these section.

Firstly 1958 adults had been going out with family and friends at 19%, but 6% for 2008 adults. Also sleeping for 1958 adults were more important at 32%, while drop of 7% at 25% is sleeping for 2008 adults. However work took alot of time spended by adults of 2008 at massive 42%, on the other hand adults in 1958 took 33% of their time for work.

Lastly adults of 2008 took relaxing at home with 13%, than in adults of 1958 with just 8%, At the end travelling and spots are also more prioritised by adults of 2008 at 7% for travel and 7% for sports. Then in adults of 1958 at 2% for travel and maybe 5% for sport activities time was taken.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main contrasts accurately: work rises from 33% to 42%, while sleeping falls from 32% to 25% and socialising drops from 19% to 6%. Your overview also notes that several activities take a larger share in 2008, and you include the additional 2008 category of sport. This gives a clear account of the principal changes. However, the final comparison says sport was “maybe 5%” in 1958, although the chart does not show a sports category for that year; avoid guessing or adding unsupported figures. The overview could also be more precise by stating that working becomes the largest activity in 2008, whereas sleeping and working are almost equal in 1958. Overall, the key information is addressed and supported with relevant data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs comparing the figures. The sequence from socialising and sleeping to work, then home relaxation and travel, is generally easy to follow. You also use linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Firstly,” “However,” and “Lastly.” At times, though, these links feel mechanical or do not clearly express the relationship between ideas. For example, “Then in 1958 it was lower in these section” is an unclear reference, and the overview combines several comparisons in one long sentence. Use clearer topic sentences and refer to activities directly rather than using vague phrases such as “these section” and “the rest of the things.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough activity-related vocabulary to describe the chart, including “sleeping,” “travelling to work,” “relaxing at home,” and “prioritised.” Some wording shows an attempt to vary expression, but several choices are inaccurate or unnatural and reduce precision. For instance, “massive 42%” is too emphatic for a neutral chart summary, “spots” appears to be a misspelling of “sports,” and “time spended” is not the correct form. Phrases such as “going out with family/friends” and “took relaxing at home” also need more natural collocations. Aim for concise, neutral reporting language, such as “accounted for,” “spent time relaxing,” and “the proportion devoted to.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “while” and “on the other hand,” and the main figures are usually understandable. However, errors in sentence structure and grammatical forms occur across the response. The opening, “Pie chart demonstrates that how…,” has an incorrect clause pattern; “the various change is” has a subject–verb agreement problem; and “sleeping for 1958 adults were” does not maintain agreement. Some sentences also run together or use punctuation inconsistently, particularly in the overview and final paragraph. Practise forming direct reporting clauses—for example, “The chart shows how adults spent their time”—and check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries. More accurate control of these patterns would make your comparisons easier to read.

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