Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given pie charts below compares the percentage of time adults spent on different activities in a specific country in the years 1958 and 2008.

Overall the percentage of working hours, relaxing at home and travelling to work increase in the year 2008 and hanging out with the family and friends reduced.

In 1958 adults used to spent 19% time of the day with either friends or family. Time for traveling and relaxing at home was significantly less while they spent 32% of the day sleeping.

Whereas in 2008, spending time with the family or friends drops dramatically from 19% to only 6%, besides working hours increased significantly to the figure 42% and the traveling time also increase from 2% to 7% which shows adults in the era of 2008 become more workaholic and less social. Moreover, sleeping percentage also drops from 32% to 25% and adults prefer relaxing at home. The percentage of playing sports remains the same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main shifts accurately: working rises from 33% to 42%, while sleeping and time with friends or family fall, and travel increases. The overview also captures the broad move towards more work and less socialising. This meets the task well, with some features reported clearly. However, the account is not fully precise: relaxing at home rises from 8% to 13%, but “adults prefer relaxing at home” does not clearly state that comparison, and the claim that playing sports “remains the same” is unsupported—the chart shows sports only in 2008, at 7%. The description of 1958 also omits the exact figures for work and relaxing. More complete, carefully checked comparisons would strengthen the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall shape: an introduction, a summary of the main trends, and details comparing the two years. The contrast introduced by “Whereas in 2008” helps signal the shift between periods, and the figures are generally placed in a sensible order. However, the progression is sometimes weakened by linking several comparisons in one long sentence, particularly the sentence beginning “Whereas in 2008,” which combines socialising, work and travel with an interpretation. “Moreover” adds another point, but the relationship between sleeping and relaxing is not made clear. Use separate sentences or paragraphs for the main categories, and make references such as “the percentage” explicit so the reader can follow each comparison more easily.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing changes, including “increased significantly,” “drops dramatically” and “reduced,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “workaholic” and “significantly less.” However, some choices are informal or imprecise for an academic report: “hanging out” and “workaholic” introduce a conversational tone and an unsupported judgement, while “the figure 42%” is an awkward collocation. Repetition of “time” and “percentage” also limits flexibility. Prefer neutral chart language such as “the proportion of the day spent working” and “fell to 6%,” and use precise terms for each activity rather than broad or evaluative expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a contrastive opening with “Whereas” and a sentence using “which shows.” The main comparisons remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “the pie charts below compares” has subject–verb disagreement, and “adults used to spent” uses the wrong verb form. In “the percentage of working hours … increase,” the verb form does not agree with the subject or match the past-time context. The final sentence, “The percentage of playing sports remains the same,” also shifts to the present and makes an inaccurate comparison. Check agreement, use past tense consistently for the two years, and ensure that subordinate clauses are complete and correctly attached.

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