Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie chart illustrate the proportion of activities that workforce spent in a particular country in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, working remained the highest sector in both years, whereas travelling to work showed negligible percentage. However, relaxing at home showed moderate share in both years.

To begin with, in 1958 working accounted for 33%, while it rose to 42% in 2008. In contrast, travelling to work held at 2% in 1958, but it increased to7% in 2008. Similarly, playing sports constituted 7% in 2008, while there was no share of sports in 1958.

On the other hand, working adults spent thier time in sleeping represented 32% in 1958, but it dropped to 25% in 2008. In addition to this, relaxing at home comprised of 8% in 1958, while it jumped to 13% in 2008. Another point is, working adults spent their time in going out with family/friends which decreased from 19% to 6%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main pattern that working took the largest share in both years and report several important changes accurately: work rose from 33% to 42%, sleep fell from 32% to 25%, and going out declined from 19% to 6%. The comparisons for travel and relaxing at home are also correct, and you include the 2008 sports figure. This gives the response clear coverage of the charts. However, the overview is not fully precise: travel was the smallest category in 1958, but in 2008 it was tied with sports at 7%, so calling it negligible in both years overgeneralises. Also, the claim that there was no sports share in 1958 is not shown as a category in the chart; avoid presenting an unreported value as certain. A more exact overview would highlight the rise in work and the decline in sleep and socialising.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction and overview are followed by two paragraphs comparing the figures. The information is generally easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “In contrast,” “Similarly,” and “On the other hand” help signal comparisons. This coherent arrangement is a strength. Some connections, however, feel mechanical or do not express the relationship precisely. “Similarly” introduces sports, which is not a direct parallel to the travel comparison, while “Another point is” adds little to the progression. The final paragraph also groups several contrasting trends without a clear organising principle. To make the progression more flexible, group increases together and decreases together, and use concise references such as “this figure” or “the proportion” to avoid repeatedly restarting with “working adults.”

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “constituted,” “comprised,” “rose,” and “decreased.” These choices help you describe proportions and changes, and the meaning is generally clear. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “highest sector” is less suitable than “largest category,” “held at 2%” suggests no change, and “comprised of 8%” is not the natural construction for reporting a share. “Moderate share” is also vague when the chart provides exact percentages. There are spelling and form slips, including “thier,” and “family/friends” is less natural than “friends and family.” Aim for precise, conventional chart language and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses with “while,” “whereas,” and “but,” and most relationships between figures remain understandable. Some grammatical errors nevertheless recur. The opening has subject–verb disagreement in “The pie chart illustrate,” and “working adults spent thier time in sleeping represented 32%” has an unclear sentence structure. In “relaxing at home comprised of 8%,” the grammatical pattern is also faulty; write, for example, “relaxing at home accounted for 8%.” There are smaller accuracy issues in “increased to7%,” where spacing and punctuation need attention. Practise building clear comparison sentences with a subject and verb for each figure, and proofread agreement, sentence structure, and punctuation.

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