Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This pie chart illustrate that how working adults in a specific country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, working has the biggest ratio of time spent in the starting which increased more with the time. Whereas, sleeping noticed to be the second more time consuming thing which partially got less in the end. While the time spent in going out with friends and family was quite normal which got even more less in the end. moreover, the time consumed in relaxing at home was quite less in the start which show a quite more ratio now.

The time spent in travelling to work was 2% in 1958 which increased to the ratio of 7%. Playing sports has been added in 2008 with the ratio of 7%. Going out with friends and family had the ratio of 19% in 1958 which gradually decreased to 6% in the end of the period.

The time spent in sleeping had more ratio of 32% in 1958 which got to seem with less ratio of 25%. The working ratio were showed to be 33% in 1958 which gradually seems to go upwards with the ratio of 42%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main categories and report several accurate comparisons: working rises from 33% to 42%, sleeping falls from 32% to 25%, travel increases from 2% to 7%, and socialising drops from 19% to 6%. The overview also identifies work as the largest share and notes the contrasting changes in sleep and time at home. This gives the response a clear account of the central trends. However, some overview wording is unclear, such as “going out … was quite normal,” and the increase in relaxing at home (8% to 13%) is not supported with figures. The 2008 sports category is mentioned, but its absence in 1958 could be made clearer. More precise overview statements and fuller comparison of the categories would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs reporting figures. This helps the reader locate the main trends, and comparisons such as 2% to 7% and 19% to 6% are grouped sensibly. However, progression is not consistently clear. The overview repeats information later, while the final paragraph returns to sleeping and working without a clear organising principle. Linking words are sometimes mechanical or inaccurate: “Whereas” and “While” begin fragments, and “moreover” is not capitalised after a full stop. Organise the details into clearer groups—for example, rising categories and falling categories—and use complete sentences with fewer, more precise transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “ratio,” “increased,” “decreased,” “travelling to work,” and “time spent,” so the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning less clear. For example, “the biggest ratio of time spent in the starting” and “quite normal” do not express the chart trends precisely; “got even more less” is also awkward. Repetition of “ratio” and “time spent” further limits flexibility. Aim to use standard chart language consistently, such as “proportion,” “accounted for,” “rose,” and “fell,” and check that each phrase accurately describes a share or change.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons with “which” and clauses introduced by “whereas” and “while.” The main figures and trends are usually understandable, but errors occur often enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For instance, “This pie chart illustrate that how…” has subject–verb and clause-structure problems, while “the working ratio were showed” has agreement and verb-form errors. “Whereas, sleeping noticed to be…” is also not a complete, well-formed clause. Focus on accurate basic sentence patterns first: “The charts illustrate how…,” “The proportion spent on work was…,” and “Sleeping accounted for….” Then add subordinate clauses only when their grammar is secure.

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