Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie charts illustrate how working youth in a specific nation use their time in different years

Overall, In these activity working profession use maximum time. Where as playing sports are minimum. While sleeping time used in average.

In 1958, people are spen their time with friends and family was 19%. while it had dwell in 2008 and reached to 6%. Furthermore, travelling to work accounted 2% in past year. Where as in 2008, it has three time of previous number like 7%. Moreover, Sleeping time spent average in both year. 32% in 1958 and 25% in 2008. many people are relaxing at home which was accounted 8% in 1958. whereas, in 2008 it has rose and reached to 13%. Working adults immerged in different activities with work. Furthermore, in 1958, working youth was 33%. After that it had rose marginally and reached to 42%. Both years presented balanced representation of work and life activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several relevant comparisons, including the fall in time spent with friends and family from 19% to 6%, the rise in commuting from 2% to 7%, and the increase in working from 33% to 42%. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: work was the largest category in both years, but sports was not the smallest in 1958, and sleeping was not “average” in a meaningful comparison. Sports appears only in the 2008 chart, at 7%, so it should not be presented as a minimum across both years. The response also omits this category’s appearance and does not clearly summarise the main overall shifts. Select the key changes accurately and state them directly in the overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, moving from an opening and overview to details about individual activities, and it uses linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “Moreover.” However, progression is not consistently clear: the overview’s points about work, sports and sleeping are difficult to interpret, and the body moves between categories without grouping the main increases and decreases. Several connectors are used mechanically or awkwardly, including “Where as” and repeated “Furthermore.” The final sentence about a “balanced representation” does not clearly follow from the comparisons. Organise the body into clearer groups—for example, categories that rose and those that fell—and use fewer, more precise transitions and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “accounted,” “reached,” “marginally” and “activities,” and the reader can generally identify the categories being discussed. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “it had dwell” does not express the decrease in socialising, “three time of previous number” is an awkward comparison, and “immerged in different activities with work” is unclear. There are also spelling and word-form problems, such as “spen” and “rose” where “risen” is needed. Build a reliable set of phrases for describing proportions and changes, and check that each verb fits its context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to use complex sentences and comparisons, but control is inconsistent, and errors occur frequently enough to make some statements hard to understand. Examples include “In 1958, people are spen their time,” where the tense and sentence structure are faulty, and “travelling to work accounted 2%,” which lacks the required grammatical pattern. Subject–verb agreement and verb forms are also problematic in “it has rose” and “working youth was 33%.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, particularly after sentence breaks and around “whereas.” Use past-tense reporting consistently, practise patterns such as “accounted for 2%” and “the figure rose to 13%,” and proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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