Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chatrs compare the proportion of time spent by working adults on several acitivites in one country in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, activities such as working, relaxing at home, playing sports and travelling to work ratios increased over the year, while going out with friends/family and sleeping was decreased over the period.

In 1958, adults spend time at working that was recored 33%, following by relaxing at home accounted for 8%. In 2008, the proportion rose to 42% in working and 13% at relaxing at home. Furthermore, travelling to work stood at 2% and playing sports represented 5%. Although, these figures rose in 2008, which were 7% in the travelling to work and by 7% of full time spend on playing sports. In contrast, the percentage of adults going out with family/friends accounted for 19%, followed by sleeping stood at 32%. In 2008, the ratios dropped to quater in sleeping and 6% in going out with friends.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main shifts accurately: working and relaxing at home rise, while sleeping and socialising fall, and you include several relevant figures. The overview also notes increases in travel and sport. However, the account is not fully precise: sports is 7% in 2008, but the 1958 chart has no sports category, so presenting it as 5% in 1958 is unsupported. “Sleeping stood at 32%” is accurate for 1958, while “dropped to quarter” would be clearer as 25% in 2008. Some comparisons are also compressed or unclear, particularly the final sentence. More precise reporting and a clearer treatment of the category absent in 1958 would strengthen coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two detail sections that compare the years. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Furthermore,” and “In contrast” help signal relationships, although some are used awkwardly: “Although, these figures rose” does not form a complete contrast with the preceding sentence, and “following by” makes the sequence difficult to follow. The final comparison also combines sleeping and going out without a clear parallel structure. Grouping the increases together and the decreases together, then using direct comparison sentences, would make the progression smoother and cohesion less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “represented,” and “stood at,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “pie chatrs,” “acitivites,” and “recored” are noticeable, while “ratios” is not the natural term for percentages of time. Phrases such as “spend time at working” and “full time spend” are also awkward collocations, and “quater” is misspelled. Aim for accurate, natural expressions such as “the share of the day spent working” and “the figure for sleeping.” Proofreading spelling and choosing standard chart collocations would make your vocabulary more controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast introduced by “Although” and clauses comparing the two years. However, some grammatical errors make parts of the report less clear. For example, “adults spend time” should use past tense (“spent”), and “going out with friends/family and sleeping was decreased” has a subject–verb agreement problem and an incorrect passive construction. “Although, these figures rose in 2008” is also an incomplete clause as written, while “the proportion rose to 42% in working” has an unclear grammatical pattern. Use consistent past-tense reporting, check agreement, and build complete clauses around contrast linkers. These changes would improve accuracy while retaining sentence variety.

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