Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the given pie chart ilustret how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008 overall it is clear that in both the highest position is working and sleeping is second position and travelling to work is increase in 2008 and going out with friend/family is decrease in 2008.

in 1958 highest position is working it was most popular which is 33% and than sleeping is the second position it is 32% similar to working and than third position is going out with friends/family which is 19 and than similar position is relaxing at home and playing sport it is 8% and 7% and the lowest is travelling to work it just 2%.

in 2008 the most popular and most highest position is working which is 42% and the second position is sleeping it is 25% and the third position is relaxing at home which is 13% and the similar position is traveling to work and playing sports it is 7% and the last position is going out with friends/family it jus 6%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern that working takes the largest share in both years and report several relevant comparisons, including the rise in working from 33% to 42% and the fall in going out from 19% to 6%. The overview also notes the increase in commuting. However, it is not fully accurate: playing sports appears only in 2008, so grouping it with relaxing at home in 1958 is incorrect. The overview could also highlight the broader shifts more clearly, such as less time spent sleeping and more time working and travelling. Some details are listed without explaining the most significant changes, so the key features are not all developed equally. Prioritise accurate comparisons between years and give a concise, data-based overview before the details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an opening overview followed by separate paragraphs for 1958 and 2008. This makes the information easy to locate, and sequencing activities by their share gives each detail a logical place. However, the progression is sometimes mechanical because many points are joined with repeated forms such as “and than” and “the second position.” The overview also contains several claims in one long sentence, which makes the relationships between the trends less clear. Use a wider range of linking and comparison structures, and group details by meaningful changes—for example, activities that increased versus those that declined. More precise referencing would also help readers distinguish the two years without relying on repeated ranking language.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “highest,” “second position,” and “decrease,” so the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated or unnatural, such as “most popular and most highest position” and “similar position.” “Position” is not the most suitable word for describing proportions, and “popular” suggests preference rather than time allocation. There are also spelling errors, including “ilustret,” and inconsistent forms such as “traveling” and “travelling.” Aim for precise Task 1 language such as “accounted for,” “share,” “proportion,” “rose,” and “fell,” while checking spelling and avoiding repeated ranking phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate the main figures using mostly simple sentence patterns, and the reader can usually follow your meaning. There are some recurring grammatical errors, however, particularly with articles, sentence boundaries, and clause construction. For example, “the given pie chart ilustret how” needs a correctly formed verb and article, while “it was most popular which is 33%” combines clauses awkwardly. The opening is also a run-on sentence, and several sentences omit necessary verbs or articles, as in “the lowest is travelling to work it just 2%.” Try using a controlled mix of simple and complex sentences, with accurate forms such as “Travelling to work accounted for 2%” and “while the figure for sleeping fell to 25%.”

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