Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates that how working adults spend their days in different activities in a particular country between 1958 and 2008.

Overall,adults spend a major portion of their time in work while spend less time for going out with their friend in 2008.Sports and home relaxation became more common.

In 1958,adults spend 33% of their time in work which increased significantly to 42% in 2008.Sleep time decreased from 32% to 25 % over the period.Travelling to work rose from 2% to 7%.Relaxing at home grew modestly from 8 % to 13 %.

On the other hand,socializing dropped sharlply to 6% from 19%, new activity such play sports accounted for 7% in 2008.

In comparison, from 1958 to 2008 adults gave more time to their instead of other activity and the second most notable things which they do is relaxing at home.In 2008 adults are less social and they travel more to work from beginning to over the period.adults are sleeping less as compare to 1958 in 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You report the main changes accurately: working rises from 33% to 42%, sleeping falls from 32% to 25%, and socialising drops from 19% to 6%; you also include the new sports category and the increases in commuting and home relaxation. The opening overview identifies work as a major use of time and notes reduced socialising, but it does not clearly summarise the most important overall contrast: work becomes the largest share while socialising declines sharply, and sleeping also takes a smaller share. The later claim that relaxing at home is the second most notable activity is inaccurate for 2008, when sleeping is second at 25%. Some comparisons are repeated or unclear, so a more selective, precise overview would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to figures and a final comparison. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “On the other hand” signal contrast. However, the final paragraph repeats points already made and does not develop a clear new comparison; “adults gave more time to their instead of other activity” is also difficult to follow. Several transitions are either awkward or insufficiently connected, and the overview runs into the next paragraph without clear spacing. Grouping the figures into increases and decreases, then ending with a concise summary, would create clearer progression and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing chart data, including “increased significantly,” “decreased,” “rose,” “dropped sharply,” and “accounted for.” These choices help communicate the main trends. However, the range is limited and some word combinations or forms are inaccurate, such as “spend less time for going out,” “socializing,” and “new activity such play sports.” “Things which they do” and repeated uses of “time” are vague or repetitive. Spelling errors such as “sharlply” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise chart language and natural collocations—for example, “the proportion spent on socialising fell” and “sports accounted for 7%”—and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response communicates the figures using both simple statements and some comparative structures, such as “decreased from 32% to 25%” and “rose from 2% to 7%.” However, grammatical errors are frequent enough to make several sentences awkward or unclear. Examples include “illustrates that how,” “adults spend” when describing past data, “while spend less time,” and “the second most notable things which they do is.” The final sentence also has an unclear comparison structure: “adults are sleeping less as compare to 1958 in 2008.” Work on consistent past tense for the two years, subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete comparative clauses. More accurate sentence patterns would make the data easier to follow.

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