Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given pie charts illustrates the information about the adults who were working in a specific country spent their time on different activities in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, total 6 activities were there where working adults spend their time.They spent most of the time on working followed by sleeping and spent the less time on playing sports.Othere activities also there like going out with family, relaxing in house and doing travel for workplace.

The working adults spent 33% percent of time on their work in 1958 which increased in 2008 with 42%. Sleeping is second activity on which they spent time with 32% in 1958 but in 2008 it declined to 25%.In 1958 working adults uses to spent their 19% of time to travel with family or friends but in 2008 it went down to only 6%.

They were also used to rest in house with 8% time spent in 1958 but coming to 2008

iy was slightly increased with 13%. Furthermore, they spent 2% of time to go for workplace but it went up in 2008 with 7%.On plyaing sports there is not much change in give time.It was 6% percent in 1958 which increases with only 1% in 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall pattern: work takes the largest share in both years and rises, while sleeping and socialising decline. Most figures are reported accurately, including work (33% to 42%), sleep (32% to 25%), and relaxing at home (8% to 13%). However, there are important misreadings: 19% in 1958 refers to going out with friends or family, not travelling, and the chart shows no sports figure for 1958; sports accounts for 7% in 2008. The overview also says adults spent the least time on sports, although this is not a valid comparison across both years. A clearer overview and more accurate treatment of the categories would make the summary more complete; some details, particularly the new sports category, are underdeveloped.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about the activities, and it uses basic links such as “Overall” and “Furthermore.” This gives the reader a general sense of the comparison. However, progression is weakened by the order and grouping of information: the paragraph shifts from work and sleep to socialising, then home relaxation and commuting, without a clear organising principle. Some connections are also confusing, especially the sentence that describes 19% as time spent travelling with family or friends. The final sports comparison is difficult to follow and conflicts with the chart. Grouping increases together and decreases together, with clear references to each year, would improve cohesion and make the comparison easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the general subject, including “working,” “sleeping,” “relax,” and “activities.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural for describing a pie chart. For example, “spent their time to travel with family or friends” confuses socialising with commuting, while “rest in house” and “go for workplace” are awkward collocations. Spelling errors such as “Othere” and “plyaing” also reduce accuracy. Repetition of “spent” and “time” makes the description less precise. Use the chart’s category labels consistently—such as “going out with friends or family” and “travelling to work”—and choose concise reporting verbs like “accounted for” or “rose to.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a mixture of simple statements and longer comparisons, and the reader can usually understand the intended meaning. However, errors in sentence structure and verb forms are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward or unclear. Examples include “The given pie charts illustrates,” where the plural subject needs a plural verb, and “adults spend their time,” which should use a past-tense form for the chart years. The construction “They were also used to rest” is not grammatically appropriate, and the final sentence, “It was 6% percent … which increases with only 1%,” has unclear reference and tense. Punctuation spacing is also inconsistent. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build comparisons with complete, clearly structured clauses.

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