Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chats illustrates the how working afults in a specific country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, The percentages of a day spent individuals working adults are doing other various activities in 1958 from 2008. There are two pie charts similar one of date 1958 and another one date 2008.

Firstly, I would like to describe a pie charts 1958 there are highlighted charts there are six colours become make highlighted of the charts .The individuals going out with friends or family in 19% .The lowest percentage working of traveling to working 2%. The sleeping people are highly 32% and relaxing people at home 8% it is middle. The last one is mostly highest after the date's working people 33%.

Secondly, In 2008,going out of working in friends or family 6%. Playing sports 7% and traveling to working same to playing sports 7% and sleeping at home 25%.The relaxing at home 13% and working 42%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify both years and report several relevant figures, including working at 33% and 42%, sleeping at 32% and 25%, and travel at 2% and 7%. However, the overview is unclear: “the percentages … in 1958 from 2008” does not summarise the main changes. Some comparisons are also confusing, such as calling travel the “lowest percentage working” and describing 33% as the “mostly highest” when it is below sleeping in 1958. The 2008 figures are listed, but the key overall shifts—more time working and travelling, and less time sleeping and socialising—are not clearly brought together. Focus on an accurate overview and explain the main contrasts rather than presenting figures without clear interpretation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an attempted overview, and separate sections for 1958 and 2008. “Firstly” and “Secondly” help signal the year-by-year organisation. However, progression is limited because the overview repeats the introduction rather than guiding the reader through the main trends, and the body sentences often place figures in a confusing order. For example, “The lowest percentage working of traveling to working 2%” is difficult to follow, while the 2008 paragraph reads mainly as a list. Use clearer topic sentences and group related comparisons, such as increases together and decreases together. More precise linking and reference would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to name the main chart categories, including “sleeping,” “working,” “relaxing at home,” and “going out with friends or family.” However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several inaccurate phrases make the data difficult to interpret. Examples include “pie chats,” “afults,” “traveling to working,” and “the sleeping people are highly.” These are spelling, word-form, or collocation problems rather than grammatical ones. Use standard chart language such as “pie charts,” “adults,” “commuting,” and “accounted for.” Avoid describing people as percentages; instead, say that an activity “represented” or “made up” a share of the day. More accurate, varied reporting verbs would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt an overview and use some longer sentence forms, but grammatical control is limited, and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. The opening, “The pie chats illustrates the how working afults … spent their time,” contains problems with articles, word order, and subject–verb agreement. In “there are two pie charts similar one of date 1958,” the sentence structure and prepositions are faulty. Several later statements are fragments or lack a clear grammatical connection, including “The individuals going out with friends or family in 19%.” Work first on complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, accurate articles and plurals, and consistent punctuation. Simple, controlled comparisons will be more effective than attempting complicated constructions before these patterns are secure.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.