Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given pie charts compares the proportions of different activities perforemd by employees during in a day for the years 1958 and 2008.

Overall, a lot changed after 50 years time span. Particularly working hours increased, going out with family and friends and sleeping is reduced. Although, their is a small change in travelling to work and relaxing at home.

There is a big rise in working hours with 33% in 1958 to 42% in 2008. The proportion of sleeping hours dropped from 32% in 1958 to 25% in 2008 which means people are working more and sleeping less now. However, percentage of playing sports remains the same 7% in 1958 and 2008.

On the other hand, people relax more ate home in 2008 which is 13% compared to 8% in 1958. Going out with family and friends dropped from 19% in 1958 to just 6% in 2008 which demonstrate that people are more engaged with their jobs rahther spend time with their friends and family. There is a minimal change in travelling to work from 2% to 7% in 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main shifts accurately: working rises from 33% to 42%, sleeping falls from 32% to 25%, and time spent going out drops from 19% to 6%. The overview also highlights the broad contrast between work and social activities, giving the response a clear central message. However, some details are incomplete or inaccurate: playing sports is shown only in 2008, at 7%, so it cannot be described as unchanged from 1958. The comment that travelling changed “minimally” also understates its increase from 2% to 7%. The explanation that people work more and therefore sleep less, or are more engaged with jobs than friends, goes beyond what the charts establish. More precise comparisons and a neutral account of the data would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs presenting comparisons. This makes the information generally easy to follow, and transitions such as “On the other hand” help signal a shift in focus. Some linking is less effective, however. “Although” begins a sentence fragment in the overview, and “However” introduces the sports claim without a clear contrast. The ideas about work and sleep are also joined by an unsupported explanation, which weakens the progression from reporting figures to interpreting them. Grouping the increases together and the decreases together, while using clearer references to each year, would make the comparisons more cohesive and less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “proportions,” “increased,” “dropped,” and “compared to,” so the main trends are understandable. There is some variety in how changes are expressed, but several choices are imprecise or unnatural for an academic report: “a lot changed,” “a big rise,” and “minimal change” do not convey the data precisely. Spelling errors such as “perforemd” and “rahther,” along with the phrase “relax more ate home,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for concise, neutral reporting language and check spelling and collocations carefully. For example, describe a rise as “an increase” and use “spent relaxing at home” rather than “relax more at home” when reporting the chart’s proportions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons with “from … to …” and a clause beginning “which means.” The overall meaning is usually clear, but some grammatical errors remain. The opening has faulty agreement and phrasing: “The given pie charts compares” should be “The pie charts compare,” and “during in a day” is not a correct construction. In the overview, “their is” should be “there is,” while “Although” is used as a sentence opener without a complete dependent clause. The sentence about sports also needs a clearer structure, such as “The 2008 chart shows 7% for playing sports.” More consistent control of agreement, clause structure, and punctuation would improve accuracy.

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