Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

this pie chart illustrates that the days spent by working adult on various activites in year 1958 and 2008 in year 1958, working adults, where about 33 % and which is increase now, in year 2008 with 42 percentage

travelling to work were 2 percentage in year 1958, and now which is increased by 7% in year 2008 going with friends and family year was 19 percentage in year 1958, which is divided by two parts in year 2008 seven percentage which is playing sport and six percentage going with friend and family, which come 13 percentage in year 2008? sleeping for 32 percentage in year 1958, and which is decreased by seven percentage in year 2008 percentage which is 25 percentage of sleeping relaxing at home in 1958 were eight percentage any year 2008, which is increased by five percentage which comes across 13 percentage of sleeping overall, since that people working are more and the less is six percentage going with friends and family in year 2008

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant figures, including working rising from 33% to 42%, travel increasing from 2% to 7%, and sleeping falling from 32% to 25%. You also notice that the 2008 socialising figure is 6% and sports accounts for 7%. However, the response does not provide a clear overview of the main changes, and the figures are presented in a difficult-to-follow sequence rather than selected and compared systematically. The statement that the 1958 socialising figure was “divided by two parts” is imprecise: the chart shows separate 2008 categories, not a literal division. Some wording also leaves the comparison unclear, such as “which comes across 13 percentage of sleeping.” A concise overview and clearer, accurate comparisons would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response includes information about several chart categories, and basic linking words such as “and,” “which,” and “overall” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the information is largely run together in one extended sequence, with no clear paragraphing or progression from an overview to supporting details. Repeated use of “in year 1958” and “in year 2008” makes the account feel repetitive, while unclear references such as “which is increased” make it hard to tell which activity is being discussed. Organise the response into a brief overview followed by grouped comparisons, and use clear sentence boundaries and references to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “increased,” “decreased,” “sleeping,” and “relaxing at home,” so the reader can recognise the chart’s subject and several trends. However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear. For example, “which is divided by two parts” does not naturally describe the separate socialising and sports categories, and “the less is six percentage” is not a clear way to identify the smallest share. There are also spelling errors such as “activites” and inconsistent forms such as “friend” for “friends.” Practise precise chart language, including “accounted for,” “rose to,” and “fell to,” and check spelling and natural phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to compare years using forms such as “were 2 percentage” and “is increased by 7%,” but sentence structures are very limited and many clauses are incomplete or joined without clear punctuation. For instance, “in year 1958, working adults, where about 33%” lacks a complete grammatical structure, while “sleeping for 32 percentage in year 1958” is also a fragment. Tense and agreement are inconsistent, as in “which is increased” when describing a past change. These errors often make relationships between figures difficult to follow. Build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, use the past tense consistently for the chart years, and separate each comparison with appropriate punctuation.

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