Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts illustraites how people who work used to spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, a glance at the charts reveals that working take's up the most of the chart in 1958 and 2008, Meanwhile, spending time with friends and family declined by nearly 1/3rd.

People used to work around 33% of their day in year 1958 which rose by 9% in 2008 reaching 42%. Working adults also used to spend around 8% of their time of the day relaxing or doing leisure activities at home back in 1958 and in 2008 it increased to 13%. Working people also used to spend very less time travelling to work which accounted for only 2% of their day. In 2008 going to work increased to 7% of the day, which is an increase of 5%. Meanwhile, there is only a slight increase of only 1% in playing sports from 6% in 1958 to 7% in 2008.

On the other hand, Job holding adults used to sleep more in 1958, sleep schedule reduced by 7% reaching 25% of the day spend by people who work in 2008. People who work also used to go out with friends and family a lot back in 1958. Percentage of this category nose dived to just 6% with a decrease of 13%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You provide a clear overview, identifying work as the largest category in both years and the sharp decline in time spent with friends and family. Most reported figures and changes are accurate: work rises from 33% to 42%, sleeping falls from 32% to 25%, and socialising drops from 19% to 6%. You also cover the increases in relaxing at home and commuting. However, the sports comparison is inaccurate: the chart shows sports only in 2008, at 7%, so there is no 1958 figure or 1% increase to report. The overview could also capture the broader contrast between rising work/commuting and falling sleep/socialising. Overall, the main features are selected and supported with relevant data, though one comparison is not grounded in the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs grouping increases and decreases. This makes the main comparisons reasonably easy to follow. Linking phrases such as “Overall,” “Meanwhile,” and “On the other hand” help signal shifts, and the figures are generally presented in a logical sequence. However, transitions are sometimes mechanical or confusing: “Meanwhile” introduces several unrelated details, and the sports sentence is placed among increases despite its unsupported comparison. Some sentences also repeat “People who work” or “Working adults,” while the final paragraph moves abruptly from sleep to socialising. Grouping all rising categories together and all falling categories together, with clearer references to the years, would improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing chart data, including “declined,” “accounted for,” “reaching,” and “decrease.” These choices help communicate the main trends, and the meaning is generally clear. However, several expressions are inaccurate or too informal for an academic report: “nose dived” is overly dramatic, “very less time” is not idiomatic, and “sleep schedule reduced” does not precisely describe the share of the day spent sleeping. There are also spelling and word-form slips, including “illustraites” and “spent” in the opening phrase. Aim for precise, neutral reporting language and use consistent terms such as “proportion,” “share,” and “time spent.” This would make the vocabulary more controlled and appropriate to the task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, and several comparisons are expressed clearly, for example, “which rose by 9% in 2008 reaching 42%.” However, some grammatical errors remain. The opening has an incorrect verb pattern in “used to spent,” and “working take’s up” has faulty agreement and apostrophe use. In “time of the day relaxing,” the preposition and sentence structure are awkward, while “the day spend by people” uses the wrong participle form. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly the comma splice and capitalisation in “1958 and 2008, Meanwhile.” These errors do not usually prevent understanding, but they reduce accuracy. Check verb forms, agreement, and sentence boundaries, especially when combining comparisons.

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