Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

in 1958, 19 percent Adults like to go outside with friends and with family .They like and enjoy to spend time with friends and family . and 2 percent adults like to travel for work in 1958 not too many person like to travel for work . and 32 percent people like to sleep and relaxed . they like to waste the time and did not do anything just sleep and eat .

8 percent adults like to stay at home they dont like to do work and going out with friends

32 percent people focus on work .

In 2008 mostly adults start doing jobs almost 45 percet . sleeping ratio is decrease just 25 percent . Going out with family and friends just 6 percent. 7 percet play sports 13 percet adults start traveling for work and 13 percet people start relaxing at home .this is the comperisson

many things changed .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant categories and make a broad comparison between the two years, including the rise in working and the fall in sleeping and socialising. However, the response only partially summarises the charts: it gives no clear overview of the main changes, and some figures are inaccurate. For example, working in 1958 was 33%, not 32%; in 2008, travelling to work was 7%, not 13%; and working was 42%, rather than “almost 45 percent.” The comment that people “did not do anything just sleep and eat” is unsupported and does not report chart data. To strengthen the response, select the largest changes, report the figures accurately, and avoid personal explanations or judgements.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows a basic chronological order, first describing 1958 and then 2008, so the reader can recognise which year is being discussed. However, there is no clear overall progression from an overview to supporting details, and the ideas within each year are presented as a loose list. Repeated openings such as “19 percent,” “2 percent,” and “32 percent” make the writing feel mechanical. The final statements, “this is the comperisson” and “many things changed,” do not effectively connect or summarise the information. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the details, and link comparisons directly—for example, contrast the increase in working with the decrease in sleeping.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “working,” “sleeping,” “relaxing,” and “travelling to work,” which makes the chart categories recognisable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are informal, repetitive, or imprecise for an academic summary. Expressions such as “like to go outside,” “waste the time,” and “start doing jobs” add unsupported interpretation rather than describing proportions. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “percet,” “comperisson,” and “relaxed” where the intended category is relaxation. Aim for concise reporting language and accurate chart vocabulary, such as “accounted for,” “rose,” “fell,” and “the proportion of adults.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences rely on simple patterns, and attempts to combine ideas often produce faulty or unclear structures. For instance, “19 percent Adults like to go outside with friends and with family” lacks a clear grammatical link between the percentage and the activity, while “and 2 percent adults like to travel” has the same problem. Verb forms and agreement are also inconsistent in “sleeping ratio is decrease,” and punctuation and capitalisation are unreliable, with sentence boundaries often missing or awkwardly placed. These errors sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to follow. Practise accurate comparison structures such as “The proportion who worked rose from 33% to 42%,” and check articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries.

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