Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie charts illusterats about working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall it is clear that before in countries of the day spent adults on various activities. In 1958 peaked at percentage of adults are sleeping while too less percentage in travelling to work. Furthermore, Now adults extremely percentage in working while very low percentage of adults on going out with friends or family. Now adults spent same time on travelling to work and playing sport.

Regarding, the pie charts shows that before adults more time spent in sleeping but now they spent more time on working before adults short time spent in relaxing at home but now hey more time relaxing at home. Therefore, before working percentage was low but now working percentage are peaked up.

In conclusion, before adults more time spent going out with family and friends but now extremely short time spent with family and friends.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several important overall changes: working takes a larger share of the day in 2008, while sleeping and going out with friends or family take smaller shares. You also note that relaxing at home increases. However, the account is only partial and lacks accurate figures to support these comparisons. For example, sleeping falls from 32% to 25%, and going out drops from 19% to 6%; working rises from 33% to 42%. The claim that adults spent the most time sleeping in 1958 is inaccurate, since working was slightly higher. The overview is also unclear in places, such as “before in countries of the day.” The response is 144 words, six short of the 150-word minimum. Include a clear overview and precise key figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, an overview, details and a conclusion, and it uses linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “Regarding” and “Therefore.” However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the second and third paragraphs repeat the same comparisons about work, sleep and relaxing, while the conclusion repeats the change in socialising. Some transitions are awkward or do not show a clear relationship between ideas, and “Now” is repeated. The opening overview is difficult to follow, which weakens the connection between the charts and the details. Group the main increases together and the decreases together, then use each paragraph to add distinct information rather than restating earlier points.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant activity vocabulary, including “sleeping,” “travelling to work,” “relaxing at home” and “going out with friends or family,” so the reader can generally identify the categories being compared. However, the range for describing chart data is limited, and several word-choice, spelling or collocation errors make the account less clear. Examples include “illusterats,” “peaked at percentage,” “extremely percentage” and “short time spent.” Use accurate terms such as “proportion,” “accounted for,” “rose” and “fell” to describe the figures. Check spelling carefully and avoid using “before” and “now” repeatedly when “in 1958” and “by 2008” would be more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer sentences, for example, “In 1958 peaked at percentage of adults are sleeping while too less percentage in travelling to work,” but the structure is often faulty and makes the meaning difficult to follow. There are recurring problems with sentence subjects and verbs, agreement, articles and tense. In “the pie charts shows,” the plural subject requires “show”; in “working percentage are peaked up,” the verb construction is not grammatical. Several clauses also lack a clear subject, as in “In 1958 peaked at percentage.” Most sentences rely on simple patterns, and attempts to connect clauses are not consistently controlled. Build clear subject–verb sentences first, then add comparisons using accurate past-tense forms.

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