Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates percentages of spending time of working audults in 1958 and 2008. overall these two chart indicates that audults reduced their sleeping and going out with friends or family than before. On the other hand, they increase working, relaxing at home and travelling to work compared to past.

First of all, these charts demosntrates that, audults spent their time on sleeping is thirty-two percent in 1958 and it reduced a little bit in 2008, which is twenty-five percent. In 1958 audults spent their time going out with friends or family is 19%, which reduced almost three times in 2008.

Although, They slightly increased their working time nine percent in 2008. In 1958 audults relaxing at home is eight percent, which was later increased to thirteen percent in 2008. Audult use to travel to work is 2% in 1958 and increased to 7% in 2008. Lastly there is one percent increase in playing sports in 2008 compared to 1958.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main overall shifts: working, relaxing at home and commuting take larger shares in 2008, while sleeping and socialising take smaller ones. Most figures you report are accurate, including sleep (32% to 25%), work (33% to 42%), and travel (2% to 7%). This gives the response a clear, relevant overview and covers the principal categories. However, the comparison of socialising is imprecise: 19% to 6% is a fall to less than one-third, rather than “almost three times” without clarifying the direction. The sports statement is also unsupported: the chart shows 7% in 2008 but gives no 1958 figure, so an increase cannot be established. More precise comparisons and a clearer account of this category would complete the summary more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an opening overview followed by details about the categories, and the sequence is generally easy to follow. Phrases such as “On the other hand,” “First of all,” and “Lastly” help signal movement between points. However, some linking is mechanical or not quite suited to the relationship between ideas; “Although” begins a sentence that does not complete a contrast, while “First of all” is followed by several categories without a clear grouping. The overview and details could be organised more deliberately, for example by comparing decreases in one paragraph and increases in another. This would make the progression clearer and reduce the sense of a list.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the chart’s main categories, including “sleeping,” “working,” “relaxing at home,” and “travelling to work.” There are also attempts to describe change with “reduced,” “increased,” and “compared to past.” However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate or awkward, such as “spending time of working adults,” “demosntrates,” and “audults.” Repeated use of “spent their time” also makes the description less precise. Aim for standard chart language and accurate spelling, using verbs such as “accounted for,” “rose,” and “fell” where appropriate. More precise phrasing would improve clarity and make comparisons sound more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with relative clauses, as in “which is twenty-five percent” and “which was later increased to thirteen percent.” Meaning is usually recoverable, but control is uneven: errors in agreement and sentence construction recur. For example, “these two chart indicates” has a plural subject with a singular verb, and “audults spent their time on sleeping is thirty-two percent” combines structures in a way that makes the sentence difficult to follow. The opening also needs clearer sentence boundaries and capitalisation after “overall.” Practise building comparisons with a consistent pattern, such as “The proportion spent sleeping fell from 32% to 25%.” This will help you use varied structures more accurately.

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