Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many parts of the world, people are increasingly choosing Western-style clothes and wearing traditional dress less often than in the past. This change can be seen among people of different ages and backgrounds.

Why is this happening?

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The statement describes a change regarding clothing fashion in the past and nowadays. In past, we couldn't see an impressive style of clothes while now it's a fact that everything took a new step and Western-style clothes have become acceptable to all of us in world. I am not sure if this statement could be a positive or negative development because we already accepted the change, especially the younger people. Regarding older people and over the age of 30, we can see a substantial increase in spending money for traditional dress and old fashion clothes have started to be acceptable. Tradition dress have now the opportunity to be present and an increasing number of people have started to wear it. I consider this statement can be negative but in the same time it can be a negative development due to the fact that all of us choose what to wear and to buy without looking at the others and without spending an impressive amount of money on clothes that maybe we don't like but they are new collections and new trends.

It's important to see fashion clothes in all countries and try not to give it a huge importance because we don't need to prove anything to anyone. I can give an example regarding fashion in the Uk. It's widely believed here that clothes are not important and we can choose anything we like to feel comfortable and also we must teach our children to try to do the same thing regarding this statement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt to address both questions and give a view, but the response only minimally fulfils the task because the reasons for the shift to Western clothing are not clearly explained. The opening says Western styles have become “acceptable to all of us,” but does not explain why, such as convenience, global media, or workplace expectations. Your position is also difficult to follow: you say you are “not sure” whether the change is positive or negative, then call it negative, and later repeat that it “can be a negative development.” The discussion of older people and traditional dress introduces a potentially relevant contrast, but its meaning and connection to the trend are unclear. Develop a consistent judgement and support it with specific reasons and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, moving from an introduction to comments about age and clothing, then to a UK example. However, ideas are not arranged in a clear progression, and the response is difficult to follow in places. For instance, the point that older people spend more on traditional dress is followed by a claim that traditional dress is increasingly worn, without explaining how this relates to the growing use of Western styles. The repeated phrase “negative development” does not clarify your position, while “Regarding older people” and “I can give an example” provide only limited links between ideas. Use separate paragraphs for causes and your evaluation, and make each paragraph develop one connected point with clear references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “traditional dress,” “Western-style clothes,” “fashion,” and “trends,” and the general subject is understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are imprecise or repetitive, which makes some ideas harder to interpret. “An impressive style of clothes” does not clearly express what was different in the past, and “everything took a new step” is an unnatural way to describe change. “Fashion clothes” and “old fashion clothes” are also unclear or awkward in this context. Aim for more precise collocations and avoid repeating broad terms such as “statement” and “clothes.” For example, describe the specific appeal or practical advantages of contemporary clothing rather than referring generally to new trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because” and “while,” so there is some structural variety. However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and errors recur in basic patterns. Examples include “In past” instead of “In the past,” “Tradition dress have” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “we already accepted the change,” which uses an unsuitable tense for a change continuing into the present. The long sentence beginning “I consider this statement…” also joins several ideas without clear grammatical control. Practise accurate articles, agreement, and tense choices, and divide long sentences into shorter units. This will make your meaning clearer while allowing you to retain complex structures.

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