Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Predictions Nov 2026 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many parts of the world, people are increasingly choosing Western-style clothes and wearing traditional dress less often than in the past. This change can be seen among people of different ages and backgrounds.

Why is this happening?

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, individuals are widely choosing western-style clothes and wearing traditional clothes are less common than in the past. People of different ages and backgrounds follow this trend. This is definetly a positive development because wearing western give them comfort and increase professionalism.

On one hand, my first point for agreeing is that regardless of traditional clothes, people prefer to wear western clothes because nowadays, people are very intelligent. They know what to wear and what to not. They choose western-style clothes because they give them ease and comfort. For instance, If a person follows a hectic routine and stays in office for longer hours, then he should choose shirt and pants type clothing because its easier to carry them longer.

On the other hand, my other point of agreeing that people wear western clothes is that because they are influenced by social media. For instance, in social media platforms, tiktokers and actresses mostly wear western clothes. Youth follows them blindly and what they wear, they follow that style.

On nother reason for agreeing is that people choose western-style clothes more often and and wearing traditional dress less often than in the past because offices demand employees to wear formal clothes. So, office workers have to wear shirt and trousers in the workplaces. For instance, some firms have code for specific department so, staff working there have to wear that clothes and style to distinguish them from member of other department. Therefore, they have to follow a specific style of clothes. Moreover, wearing same type clothes also maintain office decoram and increase professionalism.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the question: you give reasons for the shift, including comfort, social-media influence and workplace dress codes, and state that you see it as positive because it offers comfort and professionalism. These ideas are relevant, and the office example helps explain one reason. However, the positive/negative judgement is only briefly stated in the introduction; the body mainly explains why people choose Western clothes rather than showing in detail why this change benefits society. The social-media point is also asserted rather than developed, and the claim that people are “very intelligent” does not clearly explain the trend. To strengthen the response, explain the consequences of the change and develop each reason with a clearer link to your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an overall structure, with an introduction followed by paragraphs presenting reasons and examples. The examples about office routines and workplace dress codes give the reader some support for the points. However, progression is weakened by the repeated framing “my first point for agreeing,” “my other point of agreeing” and “another reason for agreeing.” The “On one hand” and “On the other hand” transitions suggest a contrast, although the paragraphs all support the same general view. Some links are also unclear, particularly the move from social-media influence to the final workplace reason. Use topic sentences that state each distinct reason, and connect each example explicitly to the question of whether the development is positive or negative.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “traditional clothes,” “social media platforms,” “hectic routine,” “formal clothes” and “professionalism.” These choices make the main ideas understandable. However, the range is limited by repeated use of “wear,” “clothes” and “western,” and some expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “shirt and pants type clothing,” “follow them blindly” and “maintain office decoram.” There are also spelling errors, including “definetly” and “nother,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise collocations and vary the language used to describe clothing and influence; for example, distinguish between “Western-style attire,” “workwear” and “traditional garments.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “If a person follows a hectic routine … then he should choose…” and clauses introduced by “because.” The main meaning is generally clear, but some grammatical errors affect accuracy. For example, “wearing traditional clothes are less common” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “Youth follows them” and “wearing same type clothes also maintain” show agreement and article or number issues. The sentence beginning “my other point of agreeing … is that because” is also structurally awkward, and several long sentences would benefit from clearer punctuation. Practise checking agreement, articles and sentence boundaries, while keeping the complex structures you are already attempting.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.