Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below compares inactivity rates across age groups and between the sexes among adults in Australia in 2005.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar graph illustrates the information about the people who did not do physical activity between male and female of different age group in Australia in the year 2005.

Overall, it is clear that the old age women and men of above 75 years had maximumm number of percentage who were inactive while in the age of 18 to 24, men showed less figure as compare to women in Australia.

In 2005, 32% of men at the age of 18 to 24 were inactive while women had recorded 37%. In the age of 25 to 34, 34% men did not do physical activity on the other hand, women had 41% of rate. In comparison with the age of 35 years to 64, the men had continuously increase in numbers whereas, the percentage of women increased till the age of 84 who were not active in physical activity. Over the age of 85, men had accounted the 56% and 61% of women did not prefer to do physical activity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and give an overview that recognises higher inactivity among older adults and lower figures for young men. You also report several relevant values, including 32% for young men and 41% for women aged 25–34. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: women aged 18–24 are shown at about 38%, not 37%, and men aged 85 and over are about 58%, rather than 56%. The statement that women’s inactivity increased “till the age of 84” misses the fall from 64% at ages 75–84 to 61% among those 85 and over. The comparison across ages 35–64 is also vague. Select the main trends more precisely and support them with accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph of figures. This gives the reader a basic route through the information, and phrases such as “Overall” and “In comparison” help signal relationships. However, the body does not progress clearly through the full age range, and the sentence beginning “In comparison with the age of 35 years to 64” combines a broad age span with an unclear comparison. “On the other hand” is used where the figures show a parallel increase rather than a contrast. Organise the details in a consistent sequence, such as younger to older groups, and group the male and female trends so each comparison is easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “inactive,” “percentage,” “recorded,” and “increased,” so the topic is generally clear. However, several word choices and collocations are awkward or imprecise, such as “between male and female,” “had maximumm number of percentage,” and “did not prefer to do physical activity.” These expressions make parts of the report less natural and sometimes obscure the intended meaning. There is also repetition of “age” and “physical activity.” Aim for accurate, conventional language for describing data—for example, refer to “men and women,” “the proportion,” and people who “were physically inactive.” Check spelling and word forms, including “maximum,” and avoid adding ideas about preference that the chart does not show.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “while” and “whereas,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in sentence construction and grammatical forms are noticeable. For example, “the old age women and men of above 75 years had maximumm number” has problems with noun phrasing and articles, while “the men had continuously increase” uses an incorrect verb form. The long sentence beginning “In comparison with the age of 35 years to 64” is difficult to follow because its clauses are not clearly structured. Work on accurate comparative patterns, articles, and verb forms, and punctuate longer sentences so the relationship between clauses is clear. More controlled complex sentences would improve accuracy and readability.

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