Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In many countries, the number of student choosing study science subject at university.However,I believe that now unemployment and poor polices are the root causes of this promble and how through provision of jobs and better goveronment planing,this promble can be curtriled.

There are multiple causes of not student are choosing to stuidy science.Firstly,unemployment is to job can be believed as the root causes ot this problem.As, a result many student consider these subject prefer easiers.take an example, the late year Nepal student in fail reason for science is news to nepal media.thus, science subject can be considered as the fueling force behind this issue.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify a possible cause—unemployment—and suggest that students may choose easier subjects, so there is a relevant starting point. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: it does not clearly explain why science enrolment is falling, and it gives almost no account of the effects on society. The opening mentions jobs and government planning, but these ideas are not developed into an answer or supported with a clear example. The Nepal reference is difficult to interpret and does not establish how the issue affects society. The response is also below the required minimum length, leaving the main ideas substantially incomplete. Develop distinct causes and social effects, explaining each with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response, with an opening statement followed by a paragraph beginning “There are multiple causes” and a sequence marker, “Firstly.” This gives the reader a basic indication that you are introducing a cause. However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the opening refers to unemployment and government planning, while the body shifts to students choosing easier subjects without explaining the connection. The example about Nepal is hard to follow, and “thus” introduces a conclusion that does not clearly follow from it. Use separate paragraphs for causes and effects, and connect each claim to its explanation and example. Check punctuation around linking words so the relationships between ideas are easier to see.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “unemployment,” “science subject,” “root causes,” and “provision of jobs.” These choices show an effort to discuss the issue rather than relying only on very general language. However, spelling errors such as “promble,” “polices,” and “goveronment” make several key terms less clear, while phrases such as “unemployment is to job” and “the late year Nepal student in fail reason” are difficult to understand because the word combinations are not natural or precise. Repetition of “problem” and “science subject” also limits range. Build a small bank of accurate phrases for causes and social consequences, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both a longer opening sentence and a sequence of connected clauses, including “As a result many student consider these subject prefer easiers.” This shows an effort to express cause and consequence, but the sentence patterns are not yet controlled enough to communicate the relationships reliably. There are recurring problems with sentence boundaries and punctuation, such as “university.However,” and with agreement and number in “many student” and “these subject.” The opening also lacks a clear grammatical structure, making the intended claim difficult to identify. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using clauses such as “because” and “as a result.” Check subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals, and punctuation in each sentence.

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