Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Students tend not to study Science, as their major, at unversites. This problem has widely grown in numerous countries, which stems from several reasons: the number of jobs has declined in the market, and students are afraid to fail during their studies because of its difficulty. Consequently, this might affect the distribution of workin hours in a certain fields and universities will shut down due to shortage in students number.

Science, in general, what made the progress in everyday technologies that we carry out. Nowadays, several shut downs and shortage in funding has made employers more restrict on money and expansions of new factories. This has affected the capactiy of scientist needed in each factory, and the number of researchers gain funds for their work. Therefore, the tendency to pursue Science in universities shown a predictable decline. For instance, after graduation, I have faced numerous obstacels to land a position as a reseachers, because of the increased comptitions with all other graduates to secure a job. In return, one position will take up the duties of several workers to shorten the number of workforce needed.

Moreover, students tend to avoid science as their major because they are afraid of failure. University professors, especially in science, provide dense info during lectures. This raise the burdens on students and, eventually, they drop from university. Althought professors don't give difficult questions on exam day, but students usually do not stay to observe exams. Eventually, this decreasing number of students might affect the staff salaries and end up closing down.

In conclusion, in many countries less number of learners are becoming interested to pursue Science at univesity. As a result of fewer jobs available and shortage in fund, consequently many universities will shut down and workers will suffer to find a job.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both causes and effects, identifying reduced job prospects and fear of failing in science courses as causes. You also mention possible effects, including fewer researchers, workers taking on several duties, and universities closing. These points are relevant, but the response only partially develops them: the link between university closures and the shortage of science students is asserted rather than explained, and the effect on society is not consistently distinguished from the effect on graduates or universities. The personal example about struggling to find a research position supports the employment point, but needs clearer connection to the wider social consequences. A more explicit position and fuller explanation of each cause and effect would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly separate causes from effects. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because causes and consequences are mixed together. For example, the first body paragraph moves from factory funding to researcher numbers, then to your job-search experience and workers’ duties without clearly signalling how each point connects. Linking expressions such as “Consequently,” “Therefore” and “Moreover” are used, but some connections are inaccurate or repetitive; the conclusion also repeats the introduction rather than drawing the main points together. Use a clearer sequence—cause, explanation, then social effect—and make references such as “this” or “it” identify a specific idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “researchers,” “funding,” “workforce” and “pursue,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several word-choice or collocation problems make parts of the response difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “the distribution of working hours in a certain fields,” “more restrict on money,” and “the capacity of scientist needed” do not express the intended ideas naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “unversites,” “capactiy,” “obstacels” and “comptitions.” Build accuracy by learning common academic collocations and checking spelling, word forms and singular/plural choices. More precise terms for employment trends and social consequences would also help you explain your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, using clauses with “because,” “which” and “after,” but complex structures are often faulty and errors occur frequently. For example, “Science, in general, what made the progress” is not a complete grammatical sentence, while “This raise the burdens” has a subject–verb agreement error. In “Although professors don’t give difficult questions on exam day, but students usually do not stay to observe exams,” the clause structure and use of “although” are problematic. Articles, plurals and verb forms also need attention, as in “in a certain fields” and “the tendency … shown a predictable decline.” Practise building complete sentences and checking agreement and clause connections; this will reduce the effort required to follow your meaning.

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