Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In certin nations not enough learners are choosing to study biology higher education institution. there so many effects it have on society

In my opinion, the science very hard in university for not intreast for student. There are several reasons why, there students believe science subjects are very difficult and science education can be expansive. but,Many students believe business and arts subjects because this subjects very easy for example, there many be fewer scientists and several reasons medical research may become slower, technology may develop more slowly. As a result, in many countries do not interest to study science at university.

Another reason is that , In students study subjects do not intreast in science,and there are a drop by research and few are scientists , future do no develop in technology.for Example , in country many issue face. There are goverment should be motivation well and salary high and different errands by science competition Although science is hard subject in face by student consequently, another problem face in country a reduction service by healthcare and medical, and many people could also tragically lose their lives due to a lack of medical care.

conclusion, in several countries reduction to study science at college therefore , govermant should be see scence subject for student to motivation and opportuity , salary .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify relevant causes, including the belief that science is difficult and the cost of science education, and you mention possible effects such as fewer scientists, slower medical research and technological development, and weaker healthcare. However, the response only partially develops the task: the causes and effects are mixed together, and examples are vague, such as “in country many issue face.” The conclusion also gives a recommendation rather than clearly summarising the effects. The response contains 220 words, so it does not meet the required minimum of 250 words; this limits the space available to explain and support your ideas. Develop each cause and effect with a clear explanation and a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an opening, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and linking expressions such as “Another reason,” “As a result” and “conclusion” show an effort to guide the reader. However, the progression is difficult to follow because causes, effects and recommendations are combined within the same paragraphs. For example, the sentence beginning “but,Many students believe business and arts subjects” moves abruptly from subject choice to the consequences of fewer scientists. Several ideas are joined without clear relationships, and references such as “this subjects” and “there” are unclear. Use one paragraph for causes and another for effects, with each paragraph following a clear sequence of explanation and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “medical research,” “technology,” “scientists” and “healthcare,” so the reader can identify the general subject of your response. However, the range is basic and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “science,” “students” and “many.” Frequent spelling and word-choice problems, such as “certin,” “expansive” where you mean expensive, “intreast” and “errands by science competition,” make some ideas difficult to understand. Some combinations are also unnatural, including “a reduction service by healthcare.” Build a more precise set of topic phrases and check spelling and collocations; this will help you express the causes and social effects more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express several connected ideas and use some longer sentences, but grammatical control is limited and errors frequently make the meaning unclear. For example, “there so many effects it have on society” lacks a clear sentence structure and correct verb agreement, while “science very hard in university for not intreast for student” has missing grammatical elements. Articles, plurals and verb forms are often inaccurate, as in “this subjects very easy” and “there are a drop.” Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, with sentence openings such as “there” and “but,Many.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then connect them using clauses such as “because” and “as a result.”

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