Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university level.

Because science is the subject that is very difficult to understand than the other subjects. Mostly students couldnot understand the basic concepts of science which can cause faliure. After that they loss there satmina and donot work hard for the next time. Therefore some students choose easy subjects so they can easily gain good marks which help them in the future to complete their goals and become a success full person in his life.

Firstly, I want to discussed about the major causes of the sciencs subjects. To study science is very difficult for the mediocur students they face many problems while they are listing, learning, or writing. They could not study it simply or easily. There concepts are not clear than they should not give focus on there study they do some extra activities which leds to faliure. So students are able too choose easy subjects which are very usefull in there future to maintain their future or achive their goals.

Secondly, I want to disscused about the uses and advantages of science. Science is a thing which changes our life completly. We are not able to do work without the use of science. It is very useful in our daily life. Through the use of science we should make many dangerous weapons for the self defence of our country. We are able to trase the location of enemy my the use of redar system.

Further more, I we disscused about students science is a tough subject but genius student choose it, give alot of time to study and work hard for their carrier. They will become a doctors, Enginners, Scientises, etc in future. They could not give much time to their extra activities, they only give there each second to study. Then they would become a secuussesful persons.

In conclusion, It is very important to study science for all students so make there good carreer and achive their goals. Now a days, without science life is very difficult and people face many problems without the use of science.

So in my opinion science is a good thing if we wants to survive in our future. So do not give up for the fear of faliure and give your best to acccive your goals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both causes and effects, and the response stays broadly on the topic. The main cause you identify is that science is difficult and students may lose confidence after struggling; you also mention that students choose easier subjects. However, the effects on society are not clearly explained. The discussion of weapons and radar describes uses of science, while the later reference to careers focuses on individual students rather than wider social consequences. The conclusion gives a general opinion about science but does not bring the causes and societal effects together. To strengthen the response, explain specific consequences of fewer science graduates—for example, shortages of researchers or slower technological and medical progress—and support these points with relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has paragraph breaks and uses basic signposts such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “Further more,” and “In conclusion,” so the reader can see an intended structure. However, the progression is not consistently logical: the paragraph introduced as discussing the “uses and advantages of science” does not directly answer what happens to society when too few students study it, and the next paragraph shifts to successful students’ careers. Several ideas are repeated, especially that science is difficult and that students choose easier subjects. Some linking phrases are also awkward or do not clarify the relationship between ideas. Organise the essay into a clear causes section and a societal-effects section, with each paragraph developing one main point and a relevant explanation or example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “basic concepts,” “self defence,” “radar system,” and career names such as “doctors” and “engineers.” These choices show an attempt to discuss science and its applications. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word forms that sometimes make the reader work to understand the intended meaning, such as “faliure,” “mediocur,” “sciencs,” and “secuussesful.” Phrases such as “good thing” and “easy subjects” are also vague for an academic discussion. Build a more precise vocabulary for causes and social consequences, and check spelling carefully. For example, you could describe students as “discouraged by the perceived difficulty” and discuss a “shortage of qualified science graduates.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer sentences with clauses, for example, “Because science is the subject…” and “After that they loss there satmina and donot work hard for the next time.” This shows some effort to vary sentence structure, and the main message is generally recoverable. However, control is inconsistent: verb forms and agreement are often inaccurate (“I want to discussed,” “they loss,” “a doctors”), and some sentences are incomplete or joined unclearly, as in the opening “Because…” fragment. Articles, pronouns, and punctuation also need attention. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check tense and agreement in each clause. More accurate control of these patterns would make your ideas easier to follow.

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