Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this contemporary era, students are not choosing science fields at university level. This is a matter of concern because science is a core subject at university. It includes various reasoning for the lack of student's interest in this prestigious field.

Science is one of the major subjects which is essential for the development of a country. In this rapidly growing world, the interest of the students is not the education, instead they are not willing to be highly qualified beacause of complexicity and difficulty of this specific field and it reflects extremely negative consequences on the nation. Furthermore, this generation is not hard working as our forefathers were. They prefer to be more in flexible side neither their is vision about to do something for your homeland. They are more influnced by the social media and their role models are also diffirent. The major problem is about the mindset which is not mature enough yet.

As a result of this issue our society is facing major effects beacsue for any society or nation educated youth plays a vital role in developing them. For example, In Pakistan students pay less attention to science at university level that is the cause this country is lacking of scientists. A society grows when their is a combination of skilled and well educated workers. If a country is not able produce such qualified people then there are very less chances of prosperity and success. High illitracy rate can increase the crime ratio and uncertanity in among people.

In conclusion, Science is a very impotant subject to be considered, their must be proper counseling and awareness to the students regarding its significance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both causes and effects, and the Pakistan example gives the discussion a relevant context. Causes include the perceived difficulty of science, students’ preference for flexibility, and the influence of social media; effects include a shortage of scientists and reduced national prosperity. However, these points are often asserted rather than explained. For instance, the link between social-media role models and lower science enrolment needs a clearer explanation, while the claim that low literacy increases crime is not directly connected to the specific effects of fewer science students. Your conclusion recommends counselling and awareness but does not clearly summarise the main causes and consequences. Develop each key idea with a more explicit explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph focused mainly on causes, one on effects, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the broad direction of your answer. You also use linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “As a result,” and “For example.” However, some connections are unclear or mechanical. The sentence beginning “In this rapidly growing world” shifts from students’ interests to their willingness to become qualified without a clear link, and “They prefer to be more in flexible side” is difficult to connect to the preceding point. Referencing such as “this issue” and “them” could be more precise. Organise each body paragraph around a clear main idea and use transitions that show the exact relationship between claims.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “development,” “role models,” “skilled,” “prosperity,” and “significance,” which helps communicate the general subject. There is also some effort to use less common expressions such as “vital role.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning unclear: “the interest of the students is not the education,” “more in flexible side,” and “lacking of scientists” are examples. Spelling errors such as “complexicity,” “influnced,” and “uncertanity” are also noticeable. Aim for precise, natural combinations, such as “students are less interested in pursuing science” and “a shortage of scientists,” and proofread carefully for spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer, connected sentences, for example the sentence beginning “Furthermore” and the sentence explaining that society needs skilled, educated workers. However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. In “They prefer to be more in flexible side neither their is vision,” the clause structure and punctuation are unclear. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence construction, as in “A society grows when their is a combination” and “If a country is not able produce such qualified people.” Practise building one clear main clause before adding subordinate ideas, and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and infinitive forms when editing.

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