Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This is a contradictory statement but i would choose that the statement is based on ground reality. Personally, I'm a student of science but i can see that students in my department are declining in each enrollment. The trend goes toward technology and computer science. Juniors prefer Ai and information technology over typical science subjects. The reason for this is simple, the growing impact of technology and artificial intelligence in our daily lives make the students to think that they should study the subjects , which can give them hope for a definite career and a good future job security . few months ago I had a conversation with my professor on the topic that science will take the position of technology but he was against my statement and told me that he was a professor and he see the interest of students more in studying AI and computer science rather than science. because students study mostly to get a job in a future and after studying science they can only get a job of a teacher to teach the science subjects and he can do some research and also work in a laboratory but if a student chooses technology over science he can build his career in software engineering, AI tools, data analysis, coding, Python and Java and multiple other technological and computer skills which the companies need to perform their daily activities. Moreover studying the computer skills rather than science help the students to get the remote jobs and work in the comfort of their homes rather than going to office and doing researches in the laboratories which the students will do after studying science so that's my point and I think it's the main reason why the students are changing the trend of studying science.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify a relevant cause: students may favour technology-related degrees because they appear to offer stronger job prospects, including careers in software engineering and data analysis. Your personal observation and conversation with your professor provide examples. However, the task asks about both causes and effects on society, and the response focuses almost entirely on why students choose technology. It does not explain the wider consequences of fewer science graduates, such as shortages of researchers, slower medical or environmental advances, or reduced scientific literacy. The opening also calls the statement “contradictory” without clarifying why, so your position is not fully established. Address both parts directly and develop at least one specific societal effect to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a recognisable line of thought: you introduce the trend, give employment prospects as a cause, and support this with your professor’s view and examples of technology careers. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, and the ideas do not progress to the task’s second part about effects on society. Several points are joined through repeated “and,” “but,” and “because,” making the explanation feel like a continuous spoken account rather than a clearly organised essay. Use separate paragraphs for the introduction, causes, and societal effects. More precise transitions and references would also help readers follow how each example supports your main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “artificial intelligence,” “data analysis,” “software engineering,” and “laboratories,” which helps explain the appeal of technology courses. Some phrases also convey the employment argument clearly, such as “job security” and “remote jobs.” However, several expressions are imprecise or repetitive, including “typical science subjects,” “the trend goes toward,” and “changing the trend of studying science.” Some wording is also awkward for an academic essay, such as “a job of a teacher.” Aim for more precise collocations and vary repeated references to “students” and “science.” This would make your argument sound more controlled and academically appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas using subordinate clauses and conditional structures, for example, “if a student chooses technology over science,” and you communicate the main cause despite grammatical problems. However, many sentences are very long and contain several clauses joined without clear punctuation, which makes relationships between ideas difficult to follow. There are also recurring errors in agreement and verb forms: “the impact … make” should be “makes,” and “he see” should be “he sees.” Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “few months ago” and the run-on passage beginning “because students study mostly.” Use shorter, controlled sentences and check agreement, capitalization, and punctuation during revision.

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