Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In my opinion, in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. I thing it is a lack of interest. Univercity Students are not too much interested to study science related subject because of the too much hardness. I was going to discuss about causes and effects on society.

Nowaday, students are not too much interested to study science subject in university because of the lack of interest and it was too much hard for some students.It is cost too much , so everyone can not afford it. Other reason is other subject is easy compare to science subject .

When students are not interested in science related subject .So that in future it wil make short of science teacher, militiry sector, scientist etc . It will make big impect on society.

They will not have too much analitical ability. So that, in future it is not good for a countries development. if you did not study science subject thats mean your country is not developed . But whice country study science subject ,their country will bwe more developed . But if you are not thats mean you are too muchfar away in military power and others important sites.

In conclusion, i can said that science is a backbon of a country. if someone countries good in science thats mean their country is far away compare to other who do not follow science. It has lot of bad sites, thats mean your county is far behind compare to other countries who follow science in university.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both causes and effects, and your central view—that low interest and the perceived difficulty and cost of science reduce enrolment—is identifiable. You also mention possible social consequences, including shortages of science teachers and scientists and weaker national development. However, these points are mostly asserted rather than explained or supported with relevant examples, and some claims are too broad, such as suggesting that not studying science means a country is not developed. The response therefore covers the task only partially, with limited development. It is also 4 words below the 250-word minimum; the 13 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To strengthen the response, explain how each cause affects students’ choices and show more specifically how reduced enrolment affects society.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on effects, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the two parts of the task. However, progression within paragraphs is weak, and several ideas are repeated, particularly the claim that science is difficult or that countries without science education fall behind. Linking phrases such as “So that” and “But” are used repeatedly and sometimes do not show the relationship between ideas clearly. The conclusion also repeats earlier claims rather than drawing them together. Organise each body paragraph around a clear main point, then explain it and give an example; use more precise links such as “As a result” or “For instance” only where they fit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, but it communicates the main topic and some relevant ideas, including “lack of interest,” “analytical ability,” and “country’s development.” The repeated use of “too much,” “science subject,” and “far behind” limits precision and makes some claims difficult to interpret. There are also frequent spelling and word-form errors, for example “Univercity,” “militiry,” “impect,” “analitical,” and “backbon.” These errors can strain the reader, especially when combined with unclear phrases such as “important sites.” Build a more accurate set of topic-specific expressions and check spelling carefully. For example, distinguish between “science subjects,” “scientific research,” and “science graduates” rather than using one general phrase throughout.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You mainly use simple sentence patterns, with a few attempts to connect ideas using “because,” “so,” and “if.” However, the range is very limited, and frequent errors sometimes distort meaning. Examples include “I thing it is a lack of interest,” “Other subject is easy compare to science subject,” and “if you did not study science subject thats mean your country is not developed.” These show problems with verb forms, sentence construction, articles, and agreement. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after full stops and sentences beginning with lowercase letters. Practise building accurate sentences with one clear subject and verb, then add a reason or result using a correctly formed clause. Proofread for sentence boundaries, verb agreement, and articles.

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