Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is undubious that science is crucial subject then other one. The debatable issue is rising that ratio of science students is declining because learner usaully avoid this stream in numerous countries. The essay will contend the causes of persistance along with its effect in upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, Numerous reasons are found behind the phenomenon, the first and the foremost one is lack of guidance about career. while make this decision, students are immature and unclear about their future. Moreover, pupils donot have propor knowledge about this subject. Besides it, science is diffcult subject. It requires complex thinking and understanding. As the result, students avoid it. For example, number of students find biology daunting task to grasp.

On the other hand, reduction in science students will have detremintal effect on society. New innovation will be limited which will effect growth of country. For example miltary requires latest weapons in order to fight with enemies. If weapons are not mordernise, it can advantagous for oppnents. This reluctance will be deleterious for all sectors. For example in agriculture sector,

Iran is using traditional tools due to lack of advacements in technology unlike Iraq.

To recapitulate, the approach is driven by lack by lack of guidance and diffcult subject which can detremintal as reduce invonation

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both parts of the question: you identify limited career guidance and the perceived difficulty of science as causes, then discuss possible effects on innovation, national development, defence and agriculture. However, the response is under the required 250 words, which limits how fully you can explain and support these points. Several claims remain brief or unclear: the biology example does not explain why students find it difficult, and the comparison between Iran and Iraq is not developed or clearly connected to the wider social effect. Your position is present, but the conclusion mainly repeats the causes and effects rather than drawing them together. Add explanation and relevant, clearly linked examples for each main idea.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, a paragraph on causes, one on effects and a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “Moreover,” “For example” and “To recapitulate” help signal the stages of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, and some connections are mechanical or unclear. For instance, the move from limited innovation to military weapons, and then to the Iran–Iraq agriculture comparison, needs clearer explanation. The opening sentence also does not establish the essay’s direction clearly, while the conclusion is very compressed. Organise each body paragraph around one main point, then explain it and give an example that directly supports it; use referencing and transitions to make those links explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “career guidance,” “complex thinking,” “innovation,” “deleterious” and “traditional tools.” This gives you some useful range, but the vocabulary is limited and frequent spelling, word-form and collocation errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “undubious,” “persistance,” “detremintal,” “mordernise” and “lack of advacements.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “science is crucial subject then other one” and “biology daunting task to grasp.” Focus on accurate, natural combinations rather than using ambitious words whose form or meaning is uncertain. Proofread spelling and choose precise terms for the effects you describe.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures, including “If weapons are not mordernise, it can advantagous for oppnents.” However, complex attempts are often faulty, and errors in articles, agreement, verb forms and sentence construction occur frequently enough to make parts of the response hard to follow. For example, “science is crucial subject” is missing an article, while “students are immature and unclear about their future” has an unclear relationship between the subject and description. The conditional sentence also needs a correctly formed verb phrase and a clear subject. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a subordinate clause, then check articles, subject–verb agreement and verb forms before adding further complexity.

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