Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Learning and getting knowledge about science is usefull for individuals in future as it help to make future bright. After analysis, it has been observed that toddlers in majority of countries do not choose science at university, whereas only few of them choose learning science. This essay will discuss the causes along with its effects on the society in the forthcoming paragraph.

To commence with, numerious reasons are found behind the phenomenon, the first and the foremost one is difficulties faced by students. To elaborate it more, students think that learning difficults subjects such as science may effect on their scores and also face many difficulties in future as their is risk of not getting any job or may face the problems by getting less wages by the companies head if they score less marks in their examination. Moreover, as there are less science teachers in school, college and university that's why it is seen that few childrens have the information and less knowledge regarding science. For instance, talking about less developed countries there are less educated people and due to which the number of science teaches is less and if individuals want to learn science at that time they face a lot of problems and may decline their result.

On the other hand, various effects can be shown for having this scenario if individual do not like to study science at university level then it will definatelly affect the growth of the country. As there will be less scientist s and due to which the inventions and research on the topics may reduce which also effect the economy of their native countries as the outcomes of positive results will be reduce. As a result, tax and other source of debits will be increased. For instance, talking about country like iran students of that country do not like to study science and this issue cause them difficulties and there is less innovation for them resultantly the overall growth of the companies reduced. Moreover, it will also be harmfull for the security of te country as military required latest and modern equipments in order to fight with their enemies and if weapons are not properly modernise then it can be disadvantage for them and advantage for others.

To sum up, although life is unpredictable without science as it help to make many inventions and has the increment in the field of technology which really make individuals life easier, yet there are less numbers of students choosing science as it is difficult to study and these issues cause negative impact on the development of the countries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the question: it identifies perceived difficulty and a shortage of science teachers as causes, then discusses effects on innovation, economic growth and national security. The main ideas are relevant, and the examples about less-developed countries and Iran help illustrate them. However, some explanations are unclear or not fully convincing. For example, the link between students’ fear of low marks and “less wages” is asserted rather than explained, while the claim that students in Iran do not like science is a broad generalisation without supporting detail. The conclusion restates the overall concern but does not add much synthesis. Develop each cause-and-effect link more carefully and use specific, credible examples to make the response more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The essay has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, one on effects, and a conclusion. The reader can follow the broad progression, and signposts such as “Moreover,” “For instance,” and “To sum up” help indicate relationships between ideas. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some of the flexibility associated with stronger cohesion. However, transitions are sometimes mechanical, particularly the repeated “Moreover” and “For instance,” and some references are unclear: “this issue” and “the outcomes of positive results” do not identify the intended idea precisely. The long sentences also combine several claims, making the progression harder to track. Use clearer links between each claim and its explanation, and divide crowded sentences where needed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate its main points, including “scientist,” “inventions,” “research,” “economy,” and “security.” It also attempts more formal expressions such as “phenomenon” and “innovation.” However, the range is limited and several noticeable word-choice, collocation, word-form, and spelling errors sometimes make meaning difficult to interpret. Examples include “difficults subjects,” “science teaches,” “source of debits,” and “harmfull”; “toddlers” is also unsuitable for university students. Repeated general words such as “less,” “problems,” and “effect” reduce precision. Build a more accurate topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations, especially when describing employment, research, and economic consequences.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The essay attempts both simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “if individual do not like to study science” and clauses introduced by “as” and “which.” This allows the writer to express causes and consequences, but the range is limited and complex sentences are often faulty. Agreement and verb-form errors appear in examples such as “it help,” “there is less scientist,” and “the overall growth … reduced.” Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries also need attention; for instance, “country like Iran” lacks an article, and several sentences join multiple ideas without clear punctuation. These errors can make relationships between ideas harder to follow. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and build shorter, controlled complex sentences before adding further clauses.

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