Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Science is the most good thing that the scientists explored. Without the science itself everything would be mysterious for us. Students before tends to study science but nowadays students are not that much interested to study science across the world. As my assumption, I think the main reason could be the competition and not willing to study the same what everyone tends to do. They think if they also study science they won't be able prosper in life which is in my opinion is wrong. Because individual talents are need to study science for developing our country. If everyone thinks the same, society could fall into a great trouble.

That particular society could face problems in developing something. They will definitely be behind from the other socities. If in this era they go behind they have to face a lot. The world is going ahead much nowadays. So to be with the flow, society should atleast encourage the students who have great academic result and has potentiality to do better in future.

From my experience, what I saw in my school when we were kids everyone from our class wanted to study science. When the one with very low score wanted to study science. But eventually those who were actual talent studied science at the university and finished their undergraduate. Those who were not that much good at study and do not have focus, ended up with leaving the study. What I think if they were not taken science beforehand they could have do better in other things. As you have to be very good academically to continue studying science. Maybe this is a possible reason which effects children nowyadays. The people who failed after taking science they discourage this children to not to study science. They say to the students that there is no future studying science. And some the students taking science as threat ended up not taking science in the university. But that's totally wrong. If the student is good enough at study he definitely should take science but he is not good then he should ignore and try other things

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both the causes and effects, and your central concern—that fewer science graduates could hinder a society’s development—is relevant. The personal example about classmates also gives the response a concrete basis. However, the causes are not clearly established: competition and reluctance to follow the same path are mentioned briefly, while the later discussion focuses more on students who struggle academically and are discouraged by others. These points need to be connected explicitly to the question of declining university enrolment. Effects are also stated broadly, such as society being “behind,” without explaining specific consequences for areas like technology, healthcare, or industry. Develop each main idea with a clear explanation and a relevant example, and make your position more consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has paragraphs and a generally recognisable movement from an introduction to social effects and then a personal example. Some linking expressions, including “From my experience” and “But,” help signal relationships between ideas. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because the discussion shifts from competition to academic ability, then to students leaving science and discouraging others, without clearly showing how these points connect. Several references are also unclear, as in “they discourage this children,” where the reader must infer who “they” and “this children” refer to. Use a clearer paragraph plan—causes, effects, and supporting example—and make each paragraph develop one main point. More precise referencing and fewer abrupt transitions would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, such as “developing our country,” “academic result,” and “potentiality,” and the main message is usually understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning less clear. For example, “the most good thing” is not a natural way to describe science, “behind from the other societies” uses an unsuitable combination, and “taking science as threat” does not express the intended idea clearly. Spelling errors such as “socities” and “nowyadays” also affect accuracy. Build a bank of natural phrases for discussing education and social consequences, and check collocations and spelling when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including conditional forms such as “If everyone thinks the same, society could fall into a great trouble.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some passages difficult to follow. Examples include “Students before tends to study science,” “individual talents are need,” and “they could have do better,” which show problems with tense, agreement, and verb forms. Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention: “Because individual talents are need…” is left as a fragment, while some long sentences combine several ideas without clear control. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, then divide complex thoughts into shorter, complete sentences before attempting more elaborate structures.

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