Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In most of the states higher education students not prefer science subjects.The main causes is host nations will depends on foreign students to study science subject at universites, they will offer scholarships to foreign students to overcome the gape of science studies.The mian effects on society is the host countries companies will offer high salaries to immigrant students job market will be tough for by birth citizens. I will discuss both causes and effects in the following paragraphs.

Science studies play an important role in country research and development. Those countries who face less intake in science subjects will face serious problems such as they will depends on foreign students. The universiites will offer scholarships to foreign students to overcome the gape of science studies quota. For Example, the German Universities offer Master in Science and Technology subjects free of costs to foreign students as their german students shows no interest in science and technology subjects.

Today is the era of Science and technology less enrollment in science and technology subjects will effects the job markets . For Example, a company required a chemical engineer and the position is not fullfill due to shortage of chemical engineer graduates so they will hire skilled immigrant chemical engineer from foreign country. The companies will offer higher salaries to foreign worker for their job. The job market will be more tough to their own citzens as foreginers will already fullfill their positions in science and technology field.

In conclusion, i can say that governement will motivate their citizens to enroll in science subjects at universities so they will not rely on foreign students. The job market will be tough for those countries whose citizens will not prefer science subject.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both causes and effects, and your central point is that low domestic interest leads universities and employers to rely on international students and workers. The German university example and the chemical-engineer vacancy help make these ideas relevant. However, the causes are only partly explained: scholarships for foreign students are presented mainly as a response to low enrolment, rather than explaining why local students avoid science in the first place. The effects also focus narrowly on competition for jobs and do not explore wider consequences, such as shortages in research or innovation. Develop the underlying reasons and explain the social impact more fully, using specific links between each cause and effect.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs on causes and effects, and a conclusion. This makes the main stages of the discussion easy to identify. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes repetitive: reliance on foreign students and scholarships are repeated in both the introduction and the causes paragraph, while the effects paragraph repeats the point about immigrant workers filling positions. Connections between ideas are also occasionally unclear, particularly where the introduction moves from scholarships to salary competition. Use each paragraph to develop a distinct point, and make the relationship between cause, example, and consequence explicit. More precise referencing and a wider range of linking expressions would make the argument flow more smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “research and development,” “scholarships,” “chemical engineer,” and “job market,” so the reader can follow the subject of the essay. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “shortage of chemical engineer graduates.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors are noticeable, including “gape” for “gap,” “fullfill,” and “by birth citizens.” Repeated use of “foreign students,” “science subjects,” and “tough” also limits precision. Build a more varied set of expressions for domestic enrolment, skills shortages, and employment competition, and check spelling and natural word combinations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including conditional or explanatory structures such as “a company required a chemical engineer and the position is not fullfill due to shortage.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships difficult to understand. Examples include “The main causes is,” “countries … will face serious problems … they will depends,” and “less enrollment … will effects.” Articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise building accurate sentences with one clear main clause and a correctly formed supporting clause; then check subject–verb agreement and verb forms before adding more complex structures.

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