Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

There is no denying that, a large quantity of students are not studing science at different universities. According to this modern age, science has developing our society day by day but people are not getting interested in this field. According to my perspective, it is important to getting education in all departments including arts and sciences. But nowadays, neglecting science subjects can affect our society very badly.

On the one hand, a lot number of students are not getting interested in science. First of all, this happens because many of the students are not well aware of these subjects. They understand that they are difficult for them. This is too much against their capacity to learn and understand and feels them to be difficult. Nowadays, students believe that world has been changed into a global village by getting more interest in technology. While other students are getting more interested in online earning platforms to earn a large amount of money to meet their daily expenses. For instance, a large amount of individuals are findingonline earning platforms like Ebay, Daraz etc.

On the other hand, by neglecting all the science subjects we can not emerging like shining stars in the eyes of the world. We have

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify a relevant cause: some students see science as difficult, and you also mention the attraction of online earning. However, the response addresses the task only partially. The effects on society are not explained: “we can not emerging like shining stars in the eyes of the world” is an unclear general claim rather than a developed consequence, and the response ends mid-sentence with “We have”. Your opening gives a broad view that science matters, but does not establish a clear, sustained answer to both questions. The response is also 45 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to explain and support the causes and effects. Develop each point with a clear consequence and a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an introduction and uses paragraphing to separate possible causes from effects. Signposts such as “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the ideas are not arranged into a coherent, complete progression: the second body paragraph begins discussing effects but stops after “We have”, and the relationship between globalisation, technology, and online earning is not made clear. Some linking phrases are also used mechanically, while repeated references to students and science do not build the argument. Organise the response around one paragraph for causes and one for social effects, and use clear links to show how each point supports your answer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “science subjects”, “technology”, “global village”, and “online earning platforms”, so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “a lot number of students” and “findingonline earning platforms” are not clear or natural expressions, while “shining stars in the eyes of the world” is vague for an academic argument. Spelling errors such as “studing” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural collocations and use vocabulary that directly describes the causes and consequences, such as “perceived difficulty” or “shortage of skilled scientists”.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including “They understand that they are difficult for them” and a sentence beginning “While other students…”. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to understand. Examples include “science has developing our society”, “it is important to getting education”, and “This is too much against their capacity … and feels them to be difficult”. The final fragment, “We have”, also leaves the response grammatically incomplete. Work on verb forms and sentence construction, and check that each sentence has a complete main clause. More accurate control of basic structures will make your ideas easier to follow.

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