Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Science has become an important role in society. I agree that in numerous countries not enough students are chossing to study science at university because of high merit and expesive than other fields.

To begin with, numerous students choose fields for their secure in science obviously future is secured whereas it is more expensive compared to other fields.Numerous people choose different domain of education for different skills which are cheaper than science. There are lot of hardwork in the sceince campared to other domain of fields. Numerous people want to be software developer or choose domains related to tech whereas some are interested in automobile. Like in Pakistan to study sciene a lot money required or there are higher merit of government scholarship science study only brilliant students can achieve. Students who want to study science in private university it is more expensive not affordable for middle class.

Moreover, Like i said merit is higher than students expectation and limited seats offer to the students, my classmate he is goldmedalist of our university having 4/4 cgpa throughout the degree he took exam of mdcat 3 yeas consectively but he can't achieve seat in science study. After he regret that he just waste time to achieve it.

In conclusion, from my perspective science study is essential whereas numerous people don't want to study science due to more expense and higher merit. Goverment need to compensate the students to achieve their goals and fulfil their dreams give scholarship to the students who are srugling for thier future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify two relevant causes: the cost of science courses and high entry requirements or limited places. The Pakistan example and the account of your classmate make these points more concrete. However, the task also asks about effects on society, and this part is largely missing. The response focuses on students’ access and disappointment, rather than explaining wider consequences such as shortages of scientists, slower technological development, or reduced capacity to address public-health and environmental problems. Your position that science is important is clear, but the ideas are limited and not sufficiently developed across both parts of the question. To improve, give a separate, supported explanation of societal effects and clarify how each cause contributes to fewer students choosing science.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an opening, a paragraph beginning “To begin with,” a further paragraph introduced by “Moreover,” and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the main topic and follow the discussion of cost and admission barriers. However, progression is uneven: the second body paragraph repeats the point about high merit and limited seats rather than developing a new aspect, and there is no distinct discussion of effects on society. Linking phrases such as “Like I said” are conversational and do not clearly signal the relationship between ideas. Some sentences run together, making connections harder to follow. Organise the body around separate causes and effects, and use clear references and transitions to show how each point relates to the task.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “scholarship,” “limited seats,” “private university,” and “middle class,” which helps communicate the barriers students face. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or repetitive, such as “secure in science,” “different domain of education,” and “science study.” Spelling errors, including “chossing,” “expesive,” and “sceince,” are noticeable and can make the reader pause. Some word combinations also sound unnatural, for example “a lot money required” and “achieve their goals.” Aim to use more precise academic phrases and check spelling carefully. Replacing repeated general terms with accurate expressions for costs, admissions, and societal consequences would make your ideas clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “Students who want to study science in private university…” and a contrast introduced by “whereas.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. For example, “Science has become an important role in society” has an incorrect grammatical pattern, while “there are higher merit” has an agreement problem. The sentence about your classmate combines several ideas without clear sentence boundaries, and punctuation is often missing after full stops or introductory phrases. Work on complete sentence construction, articles and agreement, and divide long sentences into manageable units. More accurate complex sentences will help you explain causes and effects clearly.

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