Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

"The topic illustrates students not choosen science subjects at universty.The reason is that some students are facing

many difficulties in different subjects.For example:Biology,Chemistry and physics.These subjects are very difficult.

Many students thought that we choose arts subjects.Because arts is easy subject.There are many other causes of

science subjects.

Some students do not want to become a doctor.They want to become a engineer.

And now a days study science plays an important role in society.

However Many parents convienced to the children to choose study science subjects.

For example:-Medical subjects like anatomy and pathology in universty.Morever,some students do not intersted in

science subjects.

They are intersted in non-medical subjects.However,choosing to study science at universty become a good

profession.

There are many advantages of study science.It improves knowledge.It imrpoves focus and intersts in students.In

many countries mansy students study science subjects.

On the other hand arts is also a best professions.Some students want to

become pilot.Study science also important role in universties.There are few other reason in which students do not

study at science.When they choosing a science subjects as a result they fail in science subjects

or their grades in science subjects low.

The students which are interested in other subjects because they are pass good grades.And they pass easily in

science subjects.

In some other countries people study science subjects.Because they want to improve good grades in science.There

are some other reasons of study science.The students intersted in other professions like

Photography,magzines.The conclusion is that study science has a excellent oppotunities in life.In my opinion both

subjects are valuable."

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You make a few relevant points about why students may avoid science, including that they find subjects such as biology, chemistry and physics difficult and may prefer arts or other fields. You also mention possible effects, such as students failing science and science offering professional opportunities. However, the response does not clearly separate causes from effects, and several points are unclear or contradictory—for example, “They want to become a engineer” does not explain why this leads them away from science. The effects on society are barely addressed; most examples concern individual students or career choices. To develop the response, explain specific social consequences, such as shortages of scientists or slower medical and technological progress, and support each main idea with a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is some attempt to organise the response, and phrases such as “For example” and “On the other hand” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the ideas are not arranged in a clear progression: causes, advantages of science, career preferences and effects are mixed together, and the conclusion does not resolve this structure. Several transitions are used inaccurately or without a clear contrast, such as “However” before the point about parents encouraging science. Paragraphing and sentence boundaries also make the relationships between points difficult to follow. A clearer plan would use one paragraph for causes, one for effects on society, and a brief conclusion; within each paragraph, connect each explanation directly to its example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a basic range of topic-related vocabulary, including “science subjects,” “arts,” “profession,” “grades,” and examples such as “anatomy and pathology.” This gives the reader some access to your main topic. However, vocabulary is repetitive, and several word choices or collocations make ideas difficult to understand, including “improves focus and intersts,” “pass good grades,” and “excellent oppotunities.” Spelling errors such as “universty,” “convienced,” and “magzines” are also noticeable. Build a more precise set of phrases for discussing causes and social effects, and check spelling and natural combinations of words. For instance, use “achieve good grades” rather than “pass good grades,” and “career opportunities” rather than the less precise “opportunities in life.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mainly on short, simple statements, with a few attempts to link clauses using “because” and “when.” These attempts show some effort to vary sentence forms, but control is weak and errors frequently affect clarity. Examples include “Many students thought that we choose arts subjects,” where the tense and pronoun are unclear, and “When they choosing a science subjects,” which lacks a correctly formed verb phrase. Articles and agreement are also problematic in “a engineer” and “arts is easy subject.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas with correctly formed clauses. Pay particular attention to subject–verb agreement, articles, verb forms after “when,” and punctuation between complete sentences.

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