Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

in my opinion stidents are nit gettjng science because they may find it hard to study or they may have different atudy plans and career plans for life. its not important to taking science is necessary. however as now students are not gettjng acience in future there will be problems for career in doctors, aviation and health care. if students will botbtaking science society will face loss of our future doctors and pilots.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify two relevant causes: students may find science difficult, or they may prefer different study and career plans. You also mention possible effects, including shortages of doctors and pilots, so the response is connected to both parts of the question. However, these points are only briefly stated, and the effects on society are not explained beyond naming occupations. The claim that studying science is “not important” is unclear and does not support your argument. The response is also substantially below the required minimum length, leaving no room to develop reasons, explain consequences, or provide the requested examples. To improve, explain why students avoid science and how shortages would affect healthcare, technology, or other areas of society.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: it first gives possible reasons for students’ choices and then turns to future consequences with “however” and “in future.” This helps the reader recognise the two parts of your answer. However, the ideas are compressed into one paragraph, and the links between them are not always clear. For example, “its not important to taking science is necessary” is difficult to connect to the preceding reasons. The repeated reference to students not choosing science also limits progression. Use separate paragraphs for causes and effects, and connect each cause to a developed explanation. Clear transitions such as “One reason is…” and “As a result…” would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “science,” “career plans,” “doctors,” “aviation,” and “health care,” which makes the general subject understandable. However, the vocabulary is limited and some expressions are inaccurate or unclear, such as “getting science” and “loss of our future doctors and pilots.” Spelling errors, including “stidents,” “nit,” and “acience,” also make the writing less clear. Aim for more precise phrases such as “choose to study science,” “career options,” and “a shortage of qualified professionals.” Building a wider range of topic vocabulary and checking spelling will help you express the causes and social consequences more accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and a conditional idea, as in “if students will… society will face…,” showing an effort to explain a possible consequence. However, sentence structures are mostly basic, and errors in verb forms, sentence boundaries, and punctuation make several ideas difficult to understand. For example, “its not important to taking science is necessary” combines structures in a way that obscures the intended meaning. The conditional also needs a more accurate form: “If fewer students study science, society will face…” Capital letters and full stops are missing or inconsistent. Practise writing complete sentences with one clear main idea, then check verb forms and punctuation.

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