Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In these days,there are so many students in the world who avoid studying science at university.But what is the most effective method for dealing with the consequences to prefer other subjects than science.Some people believe that the science subject is difficult for students that can be cause of reduction in their grades while studying at university.However ,i think that it is wrong science is very important subject for up coming future of students in this modern technology era it becoming essential for a country to progress.In this essay, i will discuss both sides of the arguments and draw the conclusion.

First of all,pollution and and global warming is major problem today all over the world that demands for a solid stratigy and meaningfull research to overcome this problem.For example, if students at their university level study environmental science and work on the projects and research to provide protection against global warming and pollutiion issues ,it reqire to study science rather than any other subject.As a result,we can improve our ecosystem by working on science field dedicately.

In conclusion,although it is a common thought that students should not choose science subject for their gratuation.I believe that science is one of the basic need for the improvement in our society.Personally,i think should not avoid sceinces during stuy because now a days it becoming foundation of progress once country.In my personal experience as a graduated of Medical lab technology field which is foundation of diagnostic career to detect diseases through the samples ,i feel that science is becoming very essential in every feild of life students should must study these subjects to know advance skills as well as knowldege.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response is only minimally focused on the two questions. It mentions that science may seem difficult and refers to pollution and global warming, but it does not clearly explain the causes of students’ choices or develop the effects on society. The environmental example mainly describes what science students could do, rather than showing the wider consequences of too few science graduates. The introduction also promises to discuss “both sides,” although the task asks for causes and effects, and the conclusion repeats a general view that science is important without resolving those parts. To improve, organise the essay around the two questions and explain each point with a specific consequence, such as shortages of medical researchers or slower technological development.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a recognisable introduction, body paragraph and conclusion, and expressions such as “First of all,” “For example,” and “In conclusion” signal stages of the response. However, the ideas are not arranged in a clear progression that answers the task: the opening shifts to a question about the “most effective method,” the body focuses on environmental research, and the conclusion introduces personal experience in medical laboratory technology. Connections between claims are often unclear, and some linking is repetitive or awkward, as in “As a result” where the preceding example does not establish a clear societal effect. Build separate paragraphs for causes and effects, and use each paragraph’s opening sentence to state its main point before supporting it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response attempts some topic-related vocabulary, including “global warming,” “environmental science,” “ecosystem,” “diagnostic career,” and “research.” These choices show an effort to discuss science and society, but the range is uneven and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “solid stratigy,” “meaningfull research,” “work on science field,” and “foundation of progress once country.” Spelling errors such as “pollutiion,” “sceinces,” and “knowldege” also reduce clarity. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling; for instance, describe a “shortage of science graduates” and explain its “impact on society” rather than relying on broad claims.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The essay attempts both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional example beginning “if students … study environmental science” and a relative clause in “a common thought that students should not choose science.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles and verb forms occur frequently enough to make parts difficult to read. For example, “pollution and and global warming is major problem” has repetition, agreement and article problems, while “it becoming essential” lacks an auxiliary verb. Punctuation spacing and capitalisation are also inconsistent. Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then check subject–verb agreement, articles and verb forms before adding subordinate clauses.

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