Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Science is an important subject within our planet.In several countries inadequite learners are select to study science at the university level. Science is quite challenging subject and learners have to take a lot of pressure that is a few students choose this subjent.It effects our community hamperly learners will fell behind any other students and they are not able to develop our society.I will discuss about it below.

The major reason of this phenomenon is that science is more challenging subjent than any other subject.That's why a majority of learners become scared when they read this subject,this situation effects them to choose the science subject.

Secondly,during the time of study at science they have to take much more pressure rather than any other students.Due to this suffient students choose this science subject. Furthermore, during the time of their study at a university from science subject they need more money because this subject tution fee is higher than any other subject these are the reason of this case.

There are several effect on our community if students don't study in this subject.

If a student don't select science subject they won't enhance their knowledge for this reason they are not able to give any useful information to our society. Moreover, a lot of higher salary jobs are being got by students who are study at science subject. Due to this they don't get a good salary for this reason students are not able to do any work for their community.For instace in todays workd a lot of country have mandatory science subjent for their university students.

To sum up, despite the importance of science subject a lot of people don't choose it at university because of it's defeculity and presurreness.This situation effect our society

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both parts of the question by giving possible causes—difficulty, study pressure and tuition costs—and describing effects such as reduced knowledge and fewer contributions to society. The response stays focused on the topic, and the conclusion restates the main explanation. However, the ideas are limited and often asserted rather than explained. For example, the claim that science graduates obtain higher-paying jobs does not clearly show how a shortage of science students affects society, and the example about countries making science mandatory is not developed or clearly connected to the question. Explain the consequences more precisely, such as effects on research, healthcare or technological development, and support each main point with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on effects and a conclusion. Basic linking expressions such as “Secondly,” “Furthermore,” “Moreover” and “To sum up” help signal the stages of the answer. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and several links are repetitive or do not express the intended relationship. For instance, “Due to this sufficient students choose this science subject” appears to contradict the point about pressure, while the sentence about higher salaries does not clearly connect to the effect on society. Use clearer topic sentences and make each supporting sentence explain or illustrate the point immediately before it. Check that pronouns such as “they” have an unmistakable reference.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “university level,” “tuition fee,” “higher salary jobs” and “community,” so the reader can identify the subject of the essay. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “subject,” “students” and “science.” Frequent spelling and word-choice errors sometimes make meaning difficult to follow: “inadequite,” “subjent,” “hamperly” and “presurreness” are examples. Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “take a lot of pressure” and “give any useful information to our society.” Build a more accurate set of topic phrases and check spelling carefully; choose expressions that convey the intended meaning rather than relying on repeated general words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including cause-and-effect structures with “because,” “if” and “Due to this.” However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in examples such as “a student don't select” and “students who are study”; article and sentence-boundary problems occur in “Science is quite challenging subject” and “our planet.In.” These patterns recur and can make relationships between ideas harder to understand. Practise forming accurate subject–verb combinations, using articles with singular countable nouns, and separating sentences with appropriate punctuation. Once these basic patterns are more secure, add varied complex structures and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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