Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this essay i will explain the causes and effects of not choosing and study science subjects in university.

In many countries many students dont want to study science subjects they want to study non technical subjects mostly there are many reasons that why they are not choosing those subjects and what will be the effect of this on the sociiety.

In my point of view the main reasons are the complexity of the science subjects, competition and job oppertunities. science subjects are very complex and difficult to study they have complex terms understanding and students have to study alot to pass these subjects they spend most of the time of day in studying rather then doing some extra curricular activities. secondly The competion is very high if you have to study science like engineering or doctor you must have extraordinary learning ability good in grades.The 3rd and the last reason is the job oppertunities mostly students wants to get a job right after their degree and they also want it will be paid handsomly before choosing the subjects many students search the scope interest and salary pakage that should be good enough for them.

obviously if students are not going to pick the science subjects in university it will going to have bad impact on the society the country have to hire people from other countries on high wages. in the university they have resources for the science students but not enough students to study then they have to bring the students from other country on scholarships that is not going to have good impact on the economay.

To sum up we should build interst in the students in the svhool age for the science subjects and make them realise these are not horribal subjects and government should pay them btter so students shows interest to study science.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the question and maintain a relevant focus: you identify complexity, competition and perceived job prospects as reasons, then discuss reliance on overseas workers and possible economic effects. This coverage fits the task, but the causes are not equally developed. For example, the point about science being demanding is explained through study time, while the claims about competition and salaries are mostly stated rather than supported with a specific example. The effects paragraph is also brief and its link to society could be clearer: explain how shortages in fields such as engineering or medicine affect services, innovation or employment. Your conclusion offers a relevant response, but could connect more directly to the effects you have described.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an identifiable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on effects and a conclusion. Sequencing within the causes paragraph is also signposted with “secondly” and “The 3rd and the last reason.” However, progression is sometimes mechanical, and several ideas are crowded into long sentences, making relationships less clear. For instance, the sentence beginning “science subjects are very complex” moves from difficulty to study time and extracurricular activities without clearly separating the points. The effects paragraph combines hiring overseas workers with scholarships, but the connection between these outcomes needs explanation. Use clearer topic sentences and divide related ideas into shorter units; vary linking expressions and make references such as “this” or “they” explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “science subjects,” “competition,” “job opportunities,” “scholarships” and “economy.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions such as “salary package” and “extra curricular activities.” However, the range is limited and some wording is inaccurate or repetitive, which can make parts difficult to follow. Phrases such as “complex terms understanding,” “the scope interest and salary package,” and “bad impact” are not natural or precise in context. Spelling errors, including “oppertunities,” “sociiety” and “economay,” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of accurate collocations for discussing education and society, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can generally understand your main points. However, the range of structures is limited, and errors in sentence formation, verb forms, agreement and punctuation occur often enough to affect clarity. For example, “it will going to have bad impact” has an incorrect verb construction, while “students dont want to study” needs an apostrophe and more accurate agreement in the surrounding sentence. Several sentences run together, such as the explanation of science subjects’ complexity and study demands. Practise forming accurate complex sentences with clauses introduced by “because,” “although” and “which,” and check articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries during revision.

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