Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent times, there is a noticeable increase that not enough students are persuing their science study at university level. It might be possible because of competition and the grading system. Students are now intrested in Arts, Litrature and media studies because they are more in demand and also has much attractio. From my side, I think it's because of time laps between students. Now the students are not enough dedicated to give their whole time to study. Their main focus is on social media and their trends, in other words we can say that they are more digital.They are always busy in making new trends or to follow them.

This decline can have several negative impact on society. Firstly there can be a shortage of qualified scientists, engineers and doctors also. Because these professions play a vital in our society. Our society is based on these professional skills. For example if there is a lack of doctors, the development of medicines might be slow. Moreover the shortage of professional engineers lead to delicate infrastructure.If there is a shortage of sciencetists, there are the chances that our new inventions delayed.Secondly fewer science graduates may lead to slow ecmomic growth also. Countries that lack scientific skills are more dependent on foreign technologies.

In conclusion , if this trend countineus there are the chances of slow ecnomic growth and lack of modren technologies.Students should do some effort and take intrest in science studies so it could be easy for both economy and their futuers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both causes and effects, and the effects section is the stronger part: the links between fewer science graduates, shortages of doctors and engineers, slower medicine development, and reliance on foreign technology are relevant. However, the causes are less clearly explained. Competition and grading are mentioned but not developed, while the point about students’ social-media habits is broad and does not clearly explain why they choose other university subjects. The opening also says there is an “increase” in the problem, which is unclear when the task describes too few students choosing science. Your conclusion repeats the economic and technology effects but offers a general recommendation rather than drawing together the causes and consequences. Develop each cause with a clear explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph on effects, and a conclusion. Sequencing within the effects paragraph is generally understandable, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Moreover,” and “Secondly” help readers follow the points. However, the causes are crowded into one paragraph and move abruptly from competition and grading to social media, without showing how these ideas connect. Some linking is mechanical, and the repeated use of “also” does not clarify relationships. The sentence beginning “Because these professions…” is detached from the preceding claim, and the final paragraph introduces advice without a clear transition. Group related causes together and use explicit links to show cause-and-effect relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “qualified scientists,” “infrastructure,” “scientific skills,” and “foreign technologies,” which helps communicate the main effects. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make the writing less precise. For example, “more in demand” does not clearly explain why arts subjects attract students, and “delicate infrastructure” is not the intended collocation. There are also misspellings such as “persuing,” “intrested,” “sciencetists,” and “ecnomic.” These errors are noticeable and occasionally slow the reader, although the main message remains understandable. Build a more accurate set of phrases for describing university choices, workforce shortages, and economic consequences, and proofread spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “If there is a lack of doctors, the development of medicines might be slow.” This shows some ability to express consequences. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in agreement, sentence construction, articles, and punctuation recur. For example, “Arts, Litrature and media studies … has” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “Because these professions play a vital in our society” is an incomplete construction. “The shortage of professional engineers lead” also needs a plural agreement form, and several sentences run together, as in “infrastructure.If.” Practise checking each sentence for a complete clause, correct subject–verb agreement, and appropriate punctuation; this will make your ideas easier to follow.

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